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The pain i feel inside

All i want is to be free of this pain,
I just want this train we call life to end.

I can no longer play the part that i started,
because i am too broken hearted.

It hurts to much to be alive,
My life is like a restricted airway and i can't breathe,
there is no one to revive me.

So I will get off at the next stop and be set free.

The complicated pain i feel i can no longer take,
I will see you at my wake.

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  • azlyn gold member
    December 18, 2007

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    I have felt this self same way many times...great write...very emotional and deeply movung!

    Blessed Be~
    Az

  • Virginia Logsdon
    December 16, 2007
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    Oh, No!Don't do that. please!

    Great expression of your pain, but I hope you arren't really going to end your life. Please do not do that! I've been that depressed before, but it can get much better, beleive me! If you need an ear, please IM me, and I'll talk to you, listen, or whatever.


  • Midnight-Engaged
    December 15, 2007

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    Wow, that was very good! I certainly hope this isn't a personal poem as much as just a display of your talent. A quick note though, you should substitute too in for to before broken hearted and much to be alive. Well done!