I'm a dark shadow
hidden in the corner;
I'm the bearded terrorist
consuming your dreams!
Author notes
I was trying to think of something scary! Sometimes that helps to remain in the thoughts of readers!
A contest entry
- Who are you? by Naridill.
300 points, ended December 18, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
how did these lines make you feel after you read them?
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hmmm I see where you were trying to go, but I feel you didnt quite get the impact you wanted with this. At least not from me anyways. The title 'A Vixen' almost made this poem amusing. Dont give up, try playing around with different words until you get the correct effect. Thanks for sharing. Keep smiling and Keep writing
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Don't think anyone wants to see a bearded terrorist any place. Not in dreams either. Think readers would remember this.
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what are you trying to do scare us all? lol, this did the job, cant wait to see others reactions
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Intresting
An intersting consept I think the poem might have more impact if it were a little longer but overall great write
AllxThatxIxAm
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I love the bottom two lines - very intriguing and worded with such delicacy. A beautiful and indeed depthly piece of wording. Love the imagery.
Thanks for entering.
Much luck.
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Well when i saw Vixen surely jest wasnt seeing this. well done. great job and best wishes in this contest.
Tory
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Sure be flashy. Who are you really?
hehe Just messin' with you. -
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pssssssst..who are you and where have you been
LOL you knew i would say something lol...
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I am the cascading tonic of ever
which pollutes the waters with presence
Or I am just mark.. not too sure.
LOL
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