She's fingering the s.t.i.t.c.h.e.s on her arms & torso
trying to pull herself back together;;
&& she can still taste the fear
[splashing against her throat like bile]
& still can't calm the shakes down.
& His weight was [suffocating]uncomfortable
["Think about what I've been miss-miss-missing out on
all this time..."]
"We should stop-"
But the [careless] kisses & [clumsy] cares
drown out the noise...
h-his[ITS meandering] hands make her flesh crawl;;;
& he.doesnt.know.shes.biting.back.a.scream.
"We really have to stop..."
["But you don't want to."]
((Yes. She does.
[[her heart rate and minor convulsions
can testify to that]]))
"But [sir] you crossed the line when you got on top."
Author notes
true story.
happened last night.
yes, i stopped it eventually
& please be nice...
i'm still kind of... shaken.
♠
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A contest entry
- Trapped....... by BeautifulCurse.
600 points, ended December 29, 2007, 33 entries
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Wow, unique use of punctuation and phrasing. That experiance must have been so terrible. You really made the reader feel the pain. Great write.
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gorgeous darling.
♥
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beautiful
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This is so wonderfully written and I can really really feel the emotions in this piece because I've had this happen to me before...
wow, this is such a wonderful write on such a horrible situation.
Thanks so much for entering and I hope you're okay
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wow... this is intense.. it sucks that this happened.. and i truly am sorry.. this is a very touchy subject and they way you portrayed it is amazing.. the structure of this write really brings out the severity of the issue... your word choice conveys thoughts and emotions that are very real and the reader can feel them... kudos to you awesome write and good luck..
i hope things turn out well with you and that things start looking up...
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wow. really well done. clear and yet confused, i mean your emotions are clear but show your confusion. i love the last line. and again i am sorry
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Seriously
That guy is dead to me...
This poem is just... wow...
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