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Dance Beneath The Stars

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Dance Beneath The Stars

 

 

 

I watch the crimson sunset with its ever changing glow

inky velvet backdrop, stars put on a show,

the fragrance of the roses climbing up the wall

the drift of his soft voice as through the door he’ll call

 

His footfalls on the pathway, the chink of glass on glass

we sit in silent wonder side by side upon the grass,

imbibe the honeyed nectar from the grape the sweetest flavour

intoxicating minds with each sip so long to savour

 

The mellow strains of music are caught upon the breeze

he asks me if I’d like to dance there beneath the trees,

he pulls me to my feet slips his arms around my waist

we sway together slowly, for this evening there’s no haste

 

His kisses slowly placed upon my lips ignite my fire

one look into his eyes fills my body with desire,

our bodies pressed together feel the heat begin to rise

he smiles that crooked smile, he knows he’s got his prize

 

I whisper “Bed”, into his ear, he squeezes even more

he picks me up and carries me, we head towards the door

with my head upon his shoulder I caress his eager lips

feel his supple body beneath my fingertips

 

We lay upon the bed as our bodies we explore

sensations overtake us, the climax we adore

breathless as we come, together we’re replete

man and wife as one, our love is now complete.

 

 

 

 

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  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    December 20, 2007

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    you are always a woman in love,,thats how you deserve all these golds ,, pure feelings love it/you xx


  • Riftkin gold member
    December 16, 2007

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    I love the flow and rhyme here
    you have done an outstanding job here.

    Best wishes in my contest.

    Riftkin


  • Quill
    December 16, 2007
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    Another write brimming with sensuality,good luck in your comp


  • arafura gold member
    December 16, 2007

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    love is now complete...

    Very romantic... and with a nice little dash of sensuality to spice it up a bit! This is another example of how well you tell a story and how well you bring our hopes and fantasys to life! Well done! Good luck in the contest!

  • amysticwriter silver member
    December 15, 2007
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    beautiful...we can only dream...mystery

  • Bad Bill
    December 15, 2007

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    A poem of sensual splendour,
    with subtlety and pacing,
    and just a touch of extra spice
    to set the pulse a-racing.

    Cheers,
    Bill


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    December 15, 2007

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    Excellent

    This is excellent a very sensual and romantic write that touchs sensuality without using actual words to express it in a crude way. The poem draws you in and imagination takes over taking you to the point where you actually know what is going on and feel the sensuality behind the poem well done wishing you all the best in this contest Brian.

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