Why, hello there!
I haven't noticed you
before...
Who are you?
Are you one of my voices? No
you couldn't be because
my voices don't have eyes
and you have eyes
very nice eyes, may I tear them
out? No? Oh well.
Know what they tell me?
That I'm crazy but that's
not true, because
they tell me otherwise
and you know it too because
I'm just as sane as you
I'm only a mirror
right?
That people see their own
reflections.
sometimes they leave me
Don't ask me who because
you already know who!
I like them they tell
me to do fun things
but they keep
saying I'm crazy
Please make them stay
with me
I like them...
Author notes
Option #6
This was written almost 21 years ago. Hope you like it!
A contest entry
- Weird, Insane, Different--Freak me out of my skin by Demmy.
450 points, ended December 15, 2007, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I would love to judge this based on the fact that this was written in your teens, but I'm not going to (well I'll try not to at least). I really liked this. It was chilling but humorous at the same time. I think I was hooked from "may I tear them out?" and the rest did not disappoint. I like also how truly disturbing it is because we almost never see a poem from the point of view of the reflection itself, which is interesting. Very unique! Great job and good luck in the contest!
Sincerely,
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Oooo I LIKE IT! Good Luck in the competition!
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k...spooked me out, but still i dig it. hope this was totally fabricated rather than the product of your own experiences. Reminded me of that B horror flick, "Jeepers Creepers."
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Horror waits everywhere if you look you'll see it.
I quite like this , it remind me of sitting between two mirrors and watching yourself disappear. Could this be method of dimentional travel one wonders.
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You can't read this without chuckling, (and looking nervously over your shoulder)! lol! I especially liked the part: "...very nice eyes; may I tear them out?"!
This reminds me of the Xbox game, Dark Corners of the Earth (how your character flirts with madness as he's exposed to stress).
For inspiration, I suggest paraphrasing a Lovecraft tale or relating an image from one of his "scenes". Look to shamanicmusings' Hound for an excellent example.
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Judging...
fabulous! for this type of contest (which there aren't any of them like it that i've seen) it's perfect. it's a bit chilling, and at the same time, in a format that not many people use. i liked this a lot!!
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