Blue flowers weave
upon doorways of seeds
that plunge to the ocean fathomlessly.
Those petals of life
are hiddenly beautiful
but not realized in our crowded world
as we float and wither
in our new ironic separation with loneliness
of no physical comfort to move first of all.
In the middle, there is one spark of light,
the person trying to inspire us to grow
yet we might already be drowning
as we're the precious blooming sapphire lilies
that not everyone wants to examine
each brittle foliage but just break it,
and that's why I'm not even showing my stem
already submerged in sadness.
Our earth captures all of this in feature
with low activation
pausing a perched picture status,
hanging as an ornament from the night of space.
Author notes
Please don't rip the floral leaves in bad language when commenting.
In a list
A contest entry
- What Do You See Now? (round 3) by just mercedes.
700 points, ended December 21, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
deep enough???
Comments
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very deep
You went all the way with this, a great reaction to the prompt. Your words make a beautiful poem, some sadness shines through, you are the precious blooming sapphire lily, stem already submerged in sadness. You have put words together so there are two stories here, the sound of the words a bit different to the story they tell. Very well done.
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Thank you specially
You surprisingly got it, and that is because you took time for something intense. So, I reflected on all personal, as everyone has our own depression come upon us at times.
Happy by your comment,
SplishSplashPencil
P.S. And thanks for the mention in the winners ha-ha showing you fully liked everybody.
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