You left no thumbprint
but your face is burned on my eyelids
and I see each atrocity as if it were now,
when I can taste your lips
saying goodbye, over and over,
and I heave myself over water
to become part of that bad dream
over and over
striking against your stony silence;
a broken body of language
that churns at your feet
I am bruised and broken bits of wood
pencils I used to write our names
on acid free paper
that leaks sorrow out into briny banks
that you carefully built up
to stop me from seeing
you thieve every false hope
I ever misconstrued
and so, I write sad, sloppy poetry
to weaken this dammed dry idea of you.
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A contest entry
- Serious Poets Please Come In.... by Dalaney.
950 points, ended December 20, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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This piece speaks in volumes! An amazing sequence of evaluating emotion, certain of the ache that began this poetic climb. Beautiful.
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the images and language of this poem are so striking...the simplicity of it all but such depth. excellent & thank you.
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This is a great piece thanks for sharing much love
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This is an amazing poem, full of vivid imagery and emotions! This piece flowed very well and was a joy to read! Thank you for sharing!
Lauren
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No wonder your hands hurt sister..all those poems you have written. I just loved this piece. I was simply beautiful in all its detail. Wonderfully done..
Soulful Woman
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Congratulations on your 2700th poem. This was filled with vivid images and so much emotion. I could feel the pain as it flowed from each word. Congratulations on the Honorable Mention you received too. Thank you for sharing it with me and keep writing poet.
seamaiden ♥
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Congrats for the 2700th poem and what a poem it was! This is so beautiful and so emotional... Filled with feelings that just jump at you when you read this one... If all your poems are like this, then I have one heck of a time ahead to read them lol
Beautiful, beautiful work with this one. Thanks for sharing this with all of us!
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wow amazing write
congrats!
Tasha
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WOW! 2700 poems, that's an incredible achievement.
This is a great piece, I loved the lines:
"striking against your stony silence;
a broken body of language
that churns at your feet"
Congrats on the HM
- Jojo x sinnocence -
this is such a beautiful write which holds deep emotions within in metaphors that paint the images. well done and best of luck
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this is such a good entry, my friend.
"I am bruised and broken bits of wood..."
That line just grabbed me. Thank you
Love, Lane
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ty Dalaney for the HM and your comments.
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"striking against your stony silence;
a broken body of language
that churns at your feet"
Sighhh...Incredible penning, damn it. Good luck in Lane's contest, Sweetie. Congratulations on your 2700th poem...here. I'm sure you've far surpassed what I've managed to scratch down these past 35 years. Hell, you probably did at least that many in a year or two. 
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but you know your work is so much more polished... because you do not enter the first thing that comes to mind....every poem in my head ends up here or in a to do folder.
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No, it isn't...& yes, I do. 
I've posted every poem I've written in the past 3 1/2 years except for maybe 10 or 20 of 'em. 
Love you, Woman.
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I think I need to start reading every single poem you have ever written and read every poem you write from now on. Even if I have to not sleep for a week...I love your poetry..
"I am bruised and broken bits of wood
pencils I used to write our names
on acid free paper"...
love this poem, such sadness you are able to pen so beautifully, congrats on your 2700th poem...
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ty, pen friend..oh, I am way too much of a challenge, to be sure... some days I can hardly get them out fast enough.
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LOL.....I know!!...I can't keep up..one day, I am sending Shelby to daycare, just so I can read your poetry...that would be an awesome mommy day off...lol....I need to buy your book, too......
Merry Christmas..
i didn't know you're originally from Canada????
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