Seeing beneath glass, through ice,
eyes frozen in misconstrued hardness,
sharp edges enough to cut through
simple thin thoughts of home,
of a hard hearth, where shattering
would take but another brief breeze:
Falling, shard by shard, like litter of leaves
turned pale at the thought:
I was wrong. God, I was wrong.
You were not infallible, nor insignificant;
your icy stares were glitter and gone
as quickly as Spring came.
I have come home to a new hearth;
swept icicles off eaves, tears off cheeks,
and found a warmer welcome here.
Author notes
Phrase prompt "White Ivy Abandoned to Infrared".
"White Ivy" by Beyond Red
http://home.twcny.rr.com/scho/newpics/intro.html
In a list
A contest entry
- WHITE IVY ABANDONED TO INFRARED-Revised**INVITE ONLY by Blue Rew.
957 points, ended December 26, 2007, 3 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Dear poet, please do me the honor of removing your piece from this contest and re-entering it here:
http://allpoetry.com/contest/2382966
This write deserves much more than an HM but due
to the quality of several writes entered here;
I don't have enough shiny cups! My revised contest
will only award three more from this contest with
Gold, Silver, and bronze. I'm sorry for the extra
work, but wish to grace this write with more than green. Thank-you, Blue -
What a powerful write you have woven here.
Blends the phrase and photo prompt to create
a read with emotional impact. Excellent! Blue
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Wow what very good writing.I could feel some of the feelings in there,and I really enjoyed it.Keep up the great writing!
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Such an emotional poem it is a beautiful piece though Good luck with it Dear in the contest. Excellent Flow to You can feel the sadness in this the melancholy voice. I think thats the word I am trying to say Ahh my grammar sometimes
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