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It Is His

Even though he doesn't know it
he Carry's it around
he has it in his pocket
and it doesn't make a sound

i feel that it is not with me
and he has it over there
for he has to be able to see
that it is for him is all that i care

small and fragile that it is
it is all that i can offer
that is completely his

for my heart is full of love
pure as a small white dove
my heart is what it is

and my heart is his

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this is for some one close to me he will know who he is, please tell me what you think

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  • Lady-Moro
    May 29, 2008
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    this si really good, i'm the exact same way when it comes to my ex, and he doesn't even see it

  • kelbornr0
    May 21, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Once again, a fabulous read

  • angelelectra
    January 26, 2008

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    so poignant

    that was really an extraordinary poem! Your love and sincerity was so evident in this piece and the imagery used was excellent! I really love the poignancy of it all, as well as the ranging emotions you've included!

    Wonderful job, keep it up!


  • Lady-Moro
    January 6, 2008

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    Good

    your a good writer. i know how it is to love someone that they not give a shit about you. it sucks. but you are a good writer, keep it up!


  • Rogue
    December 18, 2007

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    Wow

    This is beautiful, and I love how you depicted your heart as pure small as a small white dove. Everyone is always enshrouded in the darkness of their lives, and they never remember that they are pure of heart.

    Great Write!


  • kelbornro
    December 16, 2007

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    she is right, it did touch me very deeply. you carry mine around with you everywhere to, there was not one moment i could not stop thinking of you...your my warmth and cheer and all i wished was to be with you and to hold you..this really is a beautiful poem it makes me so happy to see your improvement and the emotion behind it had me in tears of joy....thankyou

    its all i can say

    kelbornro

  • Poco Loco
    December 16, 2007

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    This is such a beautiful poem which really expresses your love for him deeply through beautiful emotion and imagery. I can guess who it is through background knowledge and i know that it will touch him deeply!
    Keep writting!
    xxx

    • Eternal-Dreamer
      December 16, 2007
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      thank you, you dont know what that means to hear you to say that,

      • Poco Loco
        December 16, 2007
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        Trust me when i say i'm certain it will! Not only is it a fantsatic poem, its the fact you've written one which will touch him most!
        xxx


  • Canis Lupus
    December 15, 2007

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    aw i think it is really sweet and made me go all soppy lol the first stanza was the best and you ended this nicelt too, Well done!

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