The world seems to be falling,
slipping beneath your grip.
The pain seems excruating,
the grief is too much to bare.
It seems that you feel like you are in a freefall,
spiraling down to a dark pit.
It seems that he is gone forever,
and ever.
He is... in the present.
He is... in this hour.
He is... not there... with his smiling face.
He is there... in you heart.
Never let your memories go with the wind.
Never let your heart give in.
Know that even if your friend is gone,
Love never dies.
Author notes
This is decated to my cousin. He just lost a good friend to the car crash at Moorestown High School NJ. He is really devastated and I ask everyone to keep him in their prayers.
A contest entry
- 100 entries... by Dancing the Rumba.
600 points, ended December 20, 2007, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - in loving memory by Improv Machinery.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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wow
you sound forlorn for good here.Tremendous poem to read dear.I am adding ya as a fav -
Though sorrowful but it brought the image of genuine feelings.
Goo Piece. thanks for sharing with us.
Enchanted Legacy
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This is so sweet, you have an amazing talent at writing!!
And all my thoughts and prayers to your cousin, Hope he is ok and dealing with things well!
God bless,
Susan
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I will indeed think of your cousin. Sorry for the loss of his school mates. Terrible tragedy for youngsters.
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i defonatly will im so sorry for his loss and hope there is a bright side for him to look on
well done by the way
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So sad
Lovely. Beautifully written. Hope too many others weren't hurt too.
Fourth line you need the word 'bear' if you mean endure, not 'bare'. Spellcheck doesn't catch homonyms unfortunately.
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Wow, first off this is brilliant writing. I love how you wrote this. Every word is so true. I love the way you think. You have a big heart and a good head on your shoulders. You are good with expressing yourself. this is very sweet and beautiful. Yet at the same time so sad. It was nice of you to dedicate a poem to your cousin to make him feel a bit better =) Wonderful write I like it
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Thank you for the sweet and kind comment. 
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No problem anytime.
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Now this is the toughest thing with MEMMORIES & LOVE. Mermories stay alive and sometimes they hurt when you think of the one you loved. But to be hurt by love is a lovely feeling too.
Nice poem dear.. Keep up the great work.
Sorry to say this, but i guess I have to point some grammatical errors. The first line. I guess it should be "the world seems to be falling".
And the fourth line should contain the word "bear" and not "bare"
Hope you dont mind in me poinint out such things. Just wanted your poems to be flawless
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Strangely enough it is a wonderful feeling, but sad feeling, to be hurt by love. If you really love someone you will hurt when they do.
Thanks for pointing those out, I will fix them. I haven't looked at this poem in a year.
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Amazing
I can relate to it with other people i know that have killed themselves and being left to deal with the pain. I love this poem and it touches me. Writing from the heart is something you do good. Amazing work. -
A beautiful poem, with a message bereavement. and I am a firm believer of that phrase "Love never dies." I think it is important to never squelch that hope. Great write!
love, ocean.
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this is wonderful. You describe grief very well. "Too much to bear", "excruciating", "spiraling down". I recently lost my 22 year old son. Your poem is very meaningful to me. What an encouraging and loving poem to write for your nephew. I will keep him in my prayers. I know some of my son's friends are having a terribly hard time with their loss too. Thanks for a poem full of hope.
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I'm so sorry for your loss. I'm glad that you found my poem meanifull and hopeful to you.
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The memories are what eat you the most
Beautiful work.
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What a nice tribute for a friend! I love the line,
'Never let your memories go with the wind.'
I hope your cousin heals from his pain, and enjoys the memories he has.
best wishes
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Thank you.
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Keep writing Jade and express your feelings no matter what.
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He'll be in my prayers.
Thought i'm a bit late
keep writing Jade!
I LOVED IT!
Annie Shadows
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wow!
absoloutly amazing poem! shows alot of feelings! luv it! ur a gd writter! xxxx claire
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A great poem expressing the bonds of love which are hard to break and which will always be treasured memories.
Return the favor?
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a very true description. great job!!! however on line one, when you say, "the world seems to falling." i would take off the ing on falling. it sounds a little strange. you could also try the world seems to be falling though that's a little lengthy. Awesome otherwise!!!
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Another bit of superb writing here. Written from the heart, with deep emotion. You are right, love never dies. It is a continuation. Good luck in the contest.
Dark
Wishes
Wayne Leon
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amazing write hun xx
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How right you are; what is kept inside, in the heart, is always a part of you and cannot be lost. Nice to remember all the good times shared with friends and loved ones who have passed on. So many people share our lives and some are only their for a short time. Love never dies - good ending.
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You can instantly tell that the grief here is not the grief of a lost love. The breaks between line 8 through 11 are moving. I had to say it out loud! Your friend is in my prayers!
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That is very sad. But I am sure this wonderufl poem will cheer him up! Good luck!
Vivien
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This is me this time
Thank you boydamaged for your comment! Yet, I have to disaggree with you on what you said: "time heals all wounds". Time can lessen pain and hurt, it can close the wound but it will still leave a scar. You never ever forget or leave behind something like this. It will linger in is his mind forever leaving a scar on his heart. Sure the open hole on his heart will close over time but when it does it will leave a pure white scar. Thanks again for your kind comment and thanks for keeping him in your thoughs!
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This is Jakkii, Jade's friend. I love you, Jade. This poem is amazing, and you said it was bad? This is one of your best poems!!!! I heart it with alllllll of my love. Really, Jade, you have some talent. Keep Writing!! And remember, Depression often is the greatest source of inspiration.
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Love this poem. I have lost a good many people resently and I can understand some of ur cousins feelings. I wish him luck and let him know that time can heal any wound, not matter how painful. Be there for him even if he says he is fine. That is the best thing u can do. Again great write and keep it up.
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