These chains that hold her, they are strong and binding,
she walked down that road, long and winding,
she never knew what the future would hold,
until into purgatory her soul she sold,
now she is in this room, chained to the cieling,
she never knew it would end like this, cold and unfeeling,
This love she had, that she sold her soul for,
never came to anything, never anything more,
then a worthless fling to the boy she loved,
until she sold her soul, and into this cell she was shoved,
He was a bad person, this she did not know,
and those feelings he had, he never let show,
he was using her for his own gain,
so that maybe, he wouldn't be slain.
he sold his soul, but wouldn't pay the price,
traded her off like a bag of old rice,
She sadly agreed because she loved him so,
but the blood that he poured it quickly does flow,
He walked away laughing to himself,
She made a promise, a bad one to herself,
she loved him, so she would do what it took,
but her lifes foundation was strongly shook,
He never loved her, but her love was true,
she is locked away forever, for this hate to stew,
he tricked her for his selfish gain,
she never knew, she was to vain
Author notes
"Love is like a violin. The music may stop now and then, but you will always need strings."
A contest entry
- PROMPT off the picture by Intricate Wordsmith.
380 points, ended January 2, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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You're an amazing writer this was a great read.
And you just know what to do with your words,
After the first two lines, I couldn't stop reading it!!
Great.
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This is one of the best poems I think i have written but I am not sure
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True to an existent
This girl in the photo that your poem was intended to be about. . .in a way sold her soul to the wrong person and did wrong things. I will tell you that your poem is good enough, in my opinion, to enter the finalists list. To help you, not to degrade you. . .I will point this out in line 15 you might want to check to make sure that the words in this line are the ones that you intended to be there.
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This is a really fgood poem I love it for a few reasons, one it reminds me of my dreams about being chained/tied to the ceiling and the walls and stuff, two it flows well and I love a poem that flows and three it's very dark and sad. I love poems like this. Well done and keep up the good work
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well said in your authors notes. love the flow and set out of this piece. nicely done. a sad dark write.
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