When I used to ask if you were okay,
You would nod, and say everything is fine.
You would never let any emotion cross your face.
Back then, if stress had taken you over,
I'd try to talk to you, help you come around.
But you refused, took it at your own pace.
Eventually all the laughs died down, and your silence,
Deafened me, to all the little things you used to say.
You said you were trying to get your things sorted out.
Through all of these times I trusted you,
I stuck by you, and put up with all your absence.
Not for one second did I look at you and doubt.
And when things between us gradually came to an end,
You didn't hesitate to close behind you the door.
You didnt look back, and I couldn't understand how.
But when I saw those tears in your eyes, Ste,
It all came flooding out, The way you loved me.
All those things that I never knew, until now.
Author notes
Its amazing how much you find out about something when its just too late. Just a bit of feeling in here.
A contest entry
- WRITE! by xorandomxo.
800 points, ended December 16, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love? by rsheafer.
700 points, ended December 24, 2007, 23 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter All Your Love Writes Here! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended March 8, 2008, 306 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Lovly
Wonderful poem, great flow. You say tyheres just a bit of feeling, i feel theres much more than that. Awsome poem!
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Wow, this is one of the most amazing poems I've ever read. I probably believe this because I can relate to this poem so well. I loved the lines
Eventually all the laughs died down, and your silence,
Deafened me, to all the little things you used to say.
You said you were trying to get your things sorted out.
and the last stanza completely blew me away. I can really relate to this poem, and it invoked a lot of emotion from me. Excellent, excellent write. I look forward to reading more of your work in the future.
XXCrimsonRaineXX
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ahh... the tragic down side of love. how wonderful... nice job in writing it. i have to admit... it brings back alot of past pains and it really makes me wanna cry... but stay strong and it'll all work out.
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Beautiful, and tragic. You never know what you've got till it's gone. And sometimes, you find things out too late. I especially like that I could see everything in this piece. Beautiful imagery, and feeling. Thank you for this write
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This is a tragic poem you've penned here. I think it really stood out. I could relate to the beginning with someone else, yet the ending is not so relating. Deeply expressed. Thanks for entering.
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This poem has captured a whole lot of emotions, and you brought them very clearly towards the reader within your words.
Congratulations with the honorable mention on this as well
you've done a good job with this!
Leander
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