aqua I could walk through
I can't look up to blue skies now
with fermenting color
through seas it comes from
nourished petals turned
as water cycle corona
for me to navigate a come,
phase of precious
surf sureness
not just to other part(s) of earth
but creator trickles to be on track with
our realization not tears
but this is as a calmness before the storm of picking
ripe fruits from which flowers are delicious prelude
and maturest before decay presents for sentiment
and my accumulated beyond momentary
crying represent hung beet leaves
for the right salty taste
not a hundred to be oblivious to
absorption with no need to lose ocean
as nature left oh to full access
is as radio with only classical operating past dingy standard
without topic of tall buildings
sponging casual while springing statically
saturated with statistics
but are we aware of fastest sound
wave communicated through
Author notes
may edit, this was my multiple careful glance with it that isn't canceling the first
if reading AN, know the something that good luck isn't
emotiCons and the applause aren't wished for by me
A contest entry
- What Do You See Now? (round 3) by just mercedes.
700 points, ended December 21, 2007, 5 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
crepe not processed by one curl
Comments
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i am drunk with your words, reading aloud, again and again, pausing on precious surf sureness, the whole third stanza holds me, back to the start, start again, this is an inspired reaction to the prompt, thank you, no applause but i am applauding loudly
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nice visiting of my honing
Echidna hey who changed the judge...
spontaneous should have been my thanks, but I cautiously wanted to watch against impairment of faculties lol of which your open mouth didn't seem btw -- so checking whether to transpose my wording now as to not offer silly shoes hee-hee...
Your spontaneity with my piece was stupendous
I feel quite complimented as to almost get parlor wish that you could be "reading aloud, again" not wanting to turn the electrifying of my brain per se. That is for celebration and I appreciate the bronze door prize of your hosting, like a knob itself of what I opened you up to.
your referencing the grasp really touched me ~
also called
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