Sold to a life not meant to her,
She drowns in the blood running
down her neck in little rivulets.
Those pretty red droplets suffocating her.
He comes to her again that night;
She shys away and yet comes closer.
Eyes dead inside begging for peace
From the King of the Night.
He takes her roughly yet again,
She follows as he stalks the night.
Others bow to him in reverence;
She is bartered to them again and again.
Convinced there is no way out,
She's trapped in her own hell.
Until she finds her own way and the
Queen of the Night's eyes die out.
Author notes
Right, this was written for a contest but i kind of missed it but I'll post it anyway. It's not very good and really needs the picture to explain it better.. but meh...
Photo this was based on is from:
http://i18.photobucket.com/albums/b150/bgcala717/VF18.jpg
Please tell me what you think
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awsomely dark
love it darling
you woulda won gold
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Ok... so you can hit me if you want... but I'm really not feeling this. Maybe I'm just not in the mind set... or maybe fix the link and I'll be able to tell you it's good? Eh :/
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Grr. the link does work!!! for me it works at least! It's not MY fault that your comp doesnt like the link! *continues to randomly babble* and its ok. i know its not that great. I said as much huns.
luffles you
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don't work for me even when im logged into photobucket... email me maybe...
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Hmm.. strange. i dont know. does the image work for the other poem... the other one i wrote i cant remember what its called. Dream something.. gods ive a bad memory. today at least. lmao.
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Wow Claire-Anne this is a dark, sad piece. Wonderful imagery you have penned here. So pleased you posted it
Thanks for sharing!
Gaylene
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Oh damn I wish you could have posted this.
This was just right for that picture! I really like the fact that you were able to put a story to it which is what I wanted, the detail was incredible too. Great job honey. Sorry about you not being able to post it.
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I like this Claire-Anne
It's dark and bloody (all good poetry should be,imo) lol.
Well written, and your word choice is excellant. To me it reads like 'Queen Of The Night' is a prostitute that is being abused.
Wonderful writing here
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