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Entomophobia

Miss Muffet has an awful fear
psychotic as she was
her therapist was never near
at least that was the buzz
arachnid fear is what she gets
she hates these bugs with no regrets
arachnid fear
arachnid fear
she thinks that they are killer pets

Miss Muffet has an awful fear
and now she hates her whey
one day sitting on her rear
some bugs did come to play
I hate those bugs, I heard her cry
please make them go I don't know why
I hate those bugs
I hate those bugs
they're yucky and they crawl and fly

Miss Muffet has an awful fear
they put her in a room
psychosis that is so severe
she'll whack you with her broom
a rubber room will keep her tight
and with her broom her bugs she'll fight
a rubber room
a rubber room
they lock her up most every night

 

 

 

Author notes

Re-wright of Alliceinpoertyland's wonderful poem:
Psychologically Unsound

Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4, 4 refrain/8
source: shadowpoetry.com

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  • micol
    December 27, 2007
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    Certainly gives the old rhyme a delightful new twist. Nicely done.


  • Ithica silver member
    December 20, 2007

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    The Trijin Refrain I think will be at the top of my list to try next. I love those refrain lines... But then again all you do inspires me so... I feel like a monkey see monkey do. This poem that you have penned is "hysterical"...


  • Desire gold member
    December 18, 2007

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    OMG!!




    rolls on the floor laughing~~~
    Woooooooooooooo Hooooooooooooooo
    Oh My Word...

    Yep the rubber room~~
    I used to think...used to when I was younger...
    the mimes...

    thought they escaped from four walls...
    for they kept their hands up and feeling
    their way out
    and said..hmmmmmmmmm
    they are wearing white gloves...
    germaphobics
    j/k...

    Love this and Your Take on the nursery rhyme~~

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    also humor!!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Many blessings too my Friend
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • penman gold member
    December 17, 2007
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    Excellent

    My goodness this is fantastic. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Jimfre Talbent
    December 16, 2007

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    Still the queen of structure I see! You took this method, paired it with a classic, and created something fun and interesting and all-round enjoyable!


  • poettrical
    December 15, 2007
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    hehe must have been fun to write - I wanna try rewriting it too!


  • StarEyes
    December 15, 2007

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    Oh my Goodness! You are sooooooo good at these types of writes! I love it! I will never know how you do this! You are great!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Swan song gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    You are a nut! But one lovely poet! Your humor is showing hrough and I really like it. I don't know if you realize it but you write some excellent light verse then can write something that is intelligent beyond the pale. Then you can turn and make a soul bleed in sadness.
    and all in a variety of forms. Stay gold dear!


  • PerVirtuous
    December 15, 2007

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    This is brilliant. I love that you have rewritten another poem and claimed its essence in a completely different form. I know how hard that is. This is excellent. Deserving of more than three bunnies.... I'll have to speak to Kevin about that.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    Excellent piece, lovely light humour and beautifully constructed.

    The spiders to must have their say
    Miss Muffet spoils their every play
    They're glad that she's locked up today
    The spiders win this round

    Sitting down and eating whey
    A spider came she wouldn't play
    Just dropped her food and ran away
    The spider can't be found

    And now to everyone's dismay
    In asylum she must stay
    To keep the nasty bugs at bay
    Lithium is downed!


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    December 15, 2007

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    Spilt my coffee all over the place laughing...this is wonderfully written and filled with many pictures to play on the mind...bugs and rubber rooms


    • Amera gold member
      December 15, 2007
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      aww... mom; I feel as proud as if I was your blood daughter when you complement my poems. I love you


  • And Hyetal
    December 15, 2007

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    Woooah, I think I just got a little kooky reading this. I would have never thought of Miss Muffet's story this way!

    Keep writing... Keep me happy!

    Always,
    Cassie


  • Never Fall in Love
    December 15, 2007

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    Haha. I have fear of bugs as well, but if you'll shut me in a rubber room ... I swear I love these buggies!
    This is Brilliant sis! I cant even look t it with a critical eye as I know it's perfect already!

    Never ♥


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    Oh My I lvoe what you have done with thie Amera! It's so clever and witty! I love the form you used, it fits so well for this poem!
    This is way better than the original! Thisa had me in fits of laughter!
    Thanks so much for your entry
    Gaylene


  • HeavenScent4U
    December 15, 2007

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    I love this. Awesome story Wonderful rhyme but I think you have a typo there dear isn't "wack" supposed to be "whack"? best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed


    • Amera gold member
      December 15, 2007
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      You cought me as I was editing it, thanks

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