LET US PRAY
By
Claude E. Doughty
11/06/07
Plans for the future
They don’t matter now
Always aware of what time it is
Doesn’t matter now
Protecting investments
Doesn’t mean a thing
When you’re losing someone who you really love
Then you’ll feel the sting
The sting of heartache and despair
Leaves us reaching for something for any thing
Any thing
Leaving nothing left to do but pray
When we haven’t got a prayer
When there’s nothing left to do but pray
When we haven’t got a prayer
Things once believed in
They’re all challenged now
Faith in the values that never change
It’s all changing now
All spent and empty
Can not comprehend
Of why you just can’t see through the darkness
That never seems to end
And it’s heartbreak and unfair
When we’re reaching for something for any thing
Any thing
Leaving nothing left to do but pray
When we haven’t got a prayer
Nothing left to do but pray
When we haven’t got a prayer
So many memories
They’re all flooding now
Pent up tears that you held inside
They’re all raining down
Unwanted vision
Still can’t turn away
From the carnage that tears at your very soul
And the debts you’ll have to pay
It’s a heartless cold affair
Still we’re reaching for something for any thing
Any thing
Leaves us nothing left to do but pray
When we haven’t got a prayer
When there’s nothing left to do but pray
When we haven’t got a prayer
Haven’t got a prayer
In a list
A contest entry
- December New Members Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended January 5, 2008, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I like this piece, but it doesn't comply with the contest rules. -
Very well put, but I think you could reach for more original expression or deeper thought
This is good. Don't get me wrong. with the right music and voice you could have a hit song. But what goes down for the popular taste doesn't necessarily qualify as good poetry or art. You have to choose what is important to you.
One thing I would do to improve this is include punctuation and maybe even some notes on how you want it sung or played. Of course this site might some day include a way to score the music with notation, but until then you'd have to do this on another site, or leave us a link to your website with music score.
Welcome to AP. Keep up the good work. Never stop crafting and improving your product. That could and probably does mean the difference between amateurs and successful artists.
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Make sure it falls within the rule limits. Thanks for taking part in the contest and here's wishing you happiness in the new year on behalf of the Greeters team at Allpoetry. -
Welcome to AllPoetry
This is a really good piece, but I really have to follow suit and wonder how this fit into the winter criteria, perhaps another perusal of the rules are in order, but very well written beside that point
Karen -
Hi there. Welcome to the site!
Lyrics show that there's a songwriter who has a targeted mission and it appears that way here. This is one reason I don't critique lyrics.
But I can tell there's an audience involved.
On subject matter, I'm in total agreement! Amen...
As for the contest, I don't see how it fits the criteria, and so I must agree with my colleagues.
Perhaps something else would have worked. Remember that the contest-holder's criteria is what entries
depend on.
Thank you, however, and welcome to the site. Should you need anything, please let us know! Warmly, CookieZeal
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Welcome to AP
A powerfully strong write it is! Just not sure how it fits into the contest rules, either
I wish you well in all your writing endeavors! -
WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY!
I thought these were wonderful lyrics, but I am just not sure they fit into the contest rules. Please review and let me know.
Welcome to the site.
Despair
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Omg!
I love it!
Wow.
Im speachless.
Great write!
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