Give me the acquiesce,
To fill your heart with glory.
Allow me to give you passion,
Deep within your being.
My soul is growing for you.
Never halting.
I don't want to look upon dark shadows,
Of what could have been.
Let my blood crawl through your veins.
Never to leave you cripple,
But always to heal.
You'll never have to dread another second.
Unknowing to you I can be your answer,
If you will please let me love you.
Author notes
Honest opinions please.
Option 1 word bank.
A contest entry
- Many Options by piccola.
900 points, ended December 14, 2007, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
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I want honest opinions on this.
Comments
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Very well penned, very good structure and the flow throughout is consistent, overall a very good write, thank you for entering it in my contest, the very best of luck to you. xXx
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A nice flow and structure. However, my personal opinion is that if a person can't find an answer for themself, no person can supply the answer nor can they find it within somebody elses shadow.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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This is pretty good. i like how you wrote it. Nice owrk! congradulations on your gold trophy. and best of luck in my contest!!! keep up your amazing work!
Crimson -
I don't usually connect with free verse but I fell in love with this. For some reason it spoke right to my heart. Thank you for taking the time to enter.
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