Everyday was the same, everything was about the booze and to get laid
Her friends that she called them were all just wrecks
Her life was going down to waste, and she couldnt care jack
She looked at life as a early death with pills and drugs
Only seventeen and more trouble than an old navy man
A mother who cared more for her drug abuse then daughter
A father that was long gone, she couldnt blame him
Struggling through school with bullying and pain, this was the way
Screaming for help, ignored and called names
This would have ended the only way
A call during the day, she had problems moving her lips
They said they cared about her, she screamed to them and hang up
Hour later, two knocks on the door, she screamed it away
Slowly creakingly a door opens, vague seeing two people coming
A hand reaching out, holding, giving her strength to fight
Pulling her up, taking her away, a second chance
A new place where no one knew her, a family that gave her love
Things she never had, they gave her, things she laughed about before
She opened her eyes, embraced her new life, holding it tight
Enjoying every day, wanting to do more then drugs, wanting a purpose
Glittering eyes, eyes full of hope, curiouse and playful
Everyday, sending a prayer to that hand that held hers
- Thank you
Author notes
#Option 1
This is very personal and everyday I cant stop thinking about the new chance I was given. I dont dare think where I would have been if that hand didnt take mine and helped me out of my self made grave.
Thank you for letting me share this with all of you!
"Grand Theft Autumn" - Meroza
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- BEAUTIFUL life changing, powerful and thought provoking. by SeptemberFaith.
450 points, ended December 23, 2007, 16 entries
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What an awesome piece. Thanks for sharing it with me.
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oh wow....uuh...i don't know what to rly say about this. it's rly good. but it hits rly close to home to a point that i can't take it....uuuhh...i don't know what to really say...i'm in that place right now...but i don't want to be pushed away from it...because right now i'm still in control and i'm not doing bad in school or anything...but yeah....uuuh...wow...it's really good but i don't know what to say rly...
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you are very lucky to have been given that second chance, and you've become a very talented poet to, talk about defeating the odds
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I loved this so much! It was so sweet! Truly truly truly loved it! Nothing else to say. Welcome to the finalists list!
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Hey thank you! This poem is very special to me and it warms my heart to know you liked it
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Very touching. I have some friends that I want to get this.. help, or whatever you call it.
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Thank you for your comment and if you have a friend that is in such problems you will have to make contackt with the people in charge in your contry. If your friend is an adult then there is little you can do unless he or she agrees on going to a rehab center, if it is a child you should contact those in charge of children. I am sorry that I'm not much of a help to you
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heyy.. there are a few spelling mistakes here... "than a old navy man" should be "an" instead of "a" and "Strugeling school" would be.. "struggling", and perhaps you should have written struggling through school, there are a few more.. tenses mistakes,,
but generally the poem really,,, gives... a .. a clear idea of something that has happened to you, i am glad that you have had the sense to revise your life and to accept the second chance that you were granted. thank you for sharing. Hope i helped. -elena
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Thank you so much for helping me out with the grama. I really do struggle a lot with it and sometimes I just forgeth to check the spelling before posting.
Once again, thank you for your helping hand!
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I think there are some language issues.. such as:
"get laid" you might consider revising this to somethng like "getting laid" or "to get laid".....
maybe try revising the second line too, it sounds past tense and that you're talking about more than one person, so I'd use "were" instead of was
... I really like this. It is a real defining life changing moment that can help others understand that there is hope. I LOVE THIS. =) I think some simple revisions in the first few lines would help. Other than that, I think you hit the nail on the head.
Criss
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Thank you for correcting my bad grama
I am now always so good with words and thank you so much for giving me the chance to share this with you and everyone that reads it!
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