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Subject To Alterations

Credibly unpredictable
Disputably without monumental purpose
Utterly for granted
In the eye of that which beholds
Beloning not to a singular being
A small grant of the miraculous
Subject to instantanious beginning
Or obliteration
Eternal sequence of repetition...
Life

On a scale of 0-10, 10 being the best, please subject my poetic ability to your criticism.

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  • Kay Laon Anders
    January 22, 2008
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    10

    Go Jamie it's your birthday! Very pretty...

    Kay


  • Father
    December 14, 2007
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    Mmm, Your ending is quite agreeable, however, I feel as if certain words could have been omitted in your poem. Certain key words such as "monumental" "singular", "instantaneous" to "uncertain".

    Yet I find your poem quite...alluring, and perhaps peaceful, which life is not.

    Bravo and well done

    P.A.