I'll keep this up until it's old
Locked inside, about to cave.
I know it's way too much to hold.
But I've got nothing left to save.
When there's nothing left outside.
I'll hope and wait for a turn in tide.
No longer can I run and hide.
That passion has just gone and died.
What did you think
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this is amazing. wow. it was so beautiful.
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thats so poetic...and sad...I love it
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Beautiful poem. I can relate. Keep up the good work. ( =
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short but sweet
your words are filled with so much emotion and passion. the way you rhyme your words is perfect.
this is such a good write!!!!
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simple...
...yet effective. You dont need fancy words to make a beautiful poem. well done. the simplicy of the rhyme scheme adds the perfect feel to your poem. Well done -
Wow!!! Great poem!! Beautiful expression, great word choice, fabulous rhyme, enjoyable rhythm!!! I relate to the words you have spoken, each stanza so full of so many thoughts and emotions, much larger in spirit than their four lines apiece...A deep poem is this one, a joy to read and experience.
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oh my...
this is a very beautiful piece.
i specifically liked these lines:
"No longer can I run and hide.
That passion has just gone and died."
this made me really sad.
whatever pain that is being felt, transitioned into me.
and i love how you captured emotion, in such a small piece. regardless of the length, the emotion is really here.
I love you..
Blessed be
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