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Beyond the Shadows

Beyond the shadows and above the sky,
alone in the dark find where true love lies.
I see your things and have a thought
look through the pain from which love wrought.

I feel you there surrounding me,
the deceit and sadness intruding me.
To be held in your arms once more,
I will gladly knock on hell's door.

What confusion has this caused.
When your here I cant find you,
When you aren't there you are.
Always there in my mind, in my heart.

When will this pain end,
when will love begin?
I know the answer now,
It lies beyond the shadow of doubt.

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I chose the pictures as my prompt.

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  • Desire gold member
    May 8, 2008

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    Welcome!!

    Beautiful Your piece qualifies and elated to see You backBest wishes in my contest Sweet Soul!!
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    May 8, 2008

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    Very nicely done
    Wishing you the very best of luck in this contest
    God speed, my friend


  • CherylAnn
    May 7, 2008

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    Broken Love has so many sad darkened emotions that fill our lives.You have penned the pain with a perfect emotional feel.The sadness is overwhelming and the pain reaches the heart as if it belongs to the reader...Excellent penning!
    Best of Luck
    Blessings
    ~CherylAnn~


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    May 7, 2008

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    Love does create such a kaleidoscope of emotions, and this poem shows that. Very well written. The flow was incredible. Good luck in the contest.


  • Tattboyspet
    April 15, 2008

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    A sad, hearfelt write that was also filled with hope and smiles ... enjoyable from first word to last fullstop
    congrats on the HM


  • Desire gold member
    December 19, 2007
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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Beyond the Shadows

    For some reason...I got to line three...
    and began balling like a baby

    I get very sensitive to energy exuded through
    words written... Oh My~~

    I caught a few spelling hiccups but it does not take from the emotions...also images You have brought to Light which grabs and tugs hard at the heartstrings
    *the deciet and sadness intruding me.
    ...looks like deciet...deceit...
    and
    *WHen your here I cant find you,
    ...When...
    but again it does not take away from Your verse

    These lines tugged at the heartstrings:
    I feel you there surrounding me,
    the deciet and sadness intruding me.
    To be held in your arms once more,
    I will gladly knock on hell's door.

    Love this piece You have penned inspired
    by the picture prompt~~

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
    **Judging will be done shortly!!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

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