The gears fall off of a pendulum
The streetlights look up and down they come
Someone calls out and his voice is scratched
I raise my head and I turn back
He calls me life in his second breath
Turns around and he's looking at death
And together they go and together they go...
A contest entry
- BEAUTIFUL life changing, powerful and thought provoking. by SeptemberFaith.
450 points, ended December 23, 2007, 16 entries
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Comments
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I didnt really get it?
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it's sort of about death...a kind of supernatural, metaphorical view to the whole thing. Kind of an imagined experience with the deceased, right before their death. stuff's falling down, you know, the world seems to be going to pieces, and the person is speaking to you.
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Lovely poem, great imagery and use of words.Keep it up!
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Concise!
"Less is more," or "A poem is the shortest distance between two words."
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