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Hush Little Angel

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He had a hundred heartbeats stuck inside his throat,
eyes devouring words upon the paper that she wrote.
Farewell, it said, in ink, blood red, had to say goodbye,
dreams were lost, gone for good, no reason left to try.

Inside her empty house lived a Mom she had to free,
locked in chains, bound to wait, for what would never be.
She could not hide the pain inside each time her cradle fell,
then something changed, it rearranged, everyone could tell.

Tired and sick of living, sick and tired of being fake,
disappointment broke her; it was more than she could take.
Her words described her pain inside, far worse than he thought,
he still thought she, alright would be, now he knows she’s not.

He found his wife; she clung to life, empty bottle in her hand,
he loved her so, why would she go? He didn’t understand.
Called for help and they came quick, soon she dressed in white,
her family cried, and doctors tried, to make her feel alright.

Baby dreams of a life it seems that had no chance to be,
and saddened fears washed with tears was all that she could see.
When every woman in the world seemed to hold a child,
she felt so cold, so all alone, her discontent compiled.

Unfulfilled and out of wishes, like a kite without a string,
blowing into tomorrow and destroying everything.
But she’ll be strong, just move along, at least she will pretend,
because she knows, next time he goes, she’ll put it to an end.


“Hush little angel,
Mama’s fallen child,
Tell all the others,
I’ll be there in just awhile."

 

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  • loveisfreedom
    October 7, 2008

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    wow

    This was for lack of a better word beautiful you captured the drama of a situation and put it down so beautifully this was 12 degrees of awesome.
    pretty cool...


  • dragontuba
    July 5, 2008

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    Omg.....This is it.....the one poem that makes my eyes water up...wow.......thank you..the rythme and the style is unique....i love it...it's everything i'm going through right now in life..my fiancee just had a misscarriage...it hurt so bad i was on my knees...we wanted it so bad..for me to be a father and her a mother...but it didn't happen..I can relate to this..

    Inside her empty house lived a Mom she had to free,
    locked in chains, bound to wait, for what would never be.
    She could not hide the pain inside each time her cradle fell,
    then something changed, it rearranged, everyone could tell.

    Your Judge
    Stephen Zogal


  • MusicMattnessLives
    February 28, 2008
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    AH!! i was slightly confused until you wrote the ending. amazing. i want to cry. best of luck!


  • cricketjeff gold member
    January 24, 2008

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    What a powerful piece. emotions hanging on every line. Well structured and rhymed. A problem for many women (and indeed couples) told graphically in verse.

    Thank-you very much for your continued support in the series. When we started running these it was hard to find rhymers on AP who would admit their guilty secrets, now many of the best "Free-Versers" are entering!
    This series has improved my own poetry enormously and Sue feels the same. We hope all entrants are using the chance to look at what other rhymers are doing and to see if they can learn and grow.

    Thank-you very much for this entry.
    Jeff and Sue


  • jacbgd2 gold member
    January 15, 2008

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    Lovely!!!!!!!  This is a beautiful piece of art work!!! Best wishes on this contest!!!!!!!


  • new light
    January 5, 2008
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    oh my,
    this is so beautiful..
    yet tragic.
    a very good write though.


  • trista gold member
    January 4, 2008

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    Yes

    Having lost a child myself...makes a poem like this difficult to read. I think you did an outstanding job of relating the feelings behind such tragedy. Yes, it's a little "prose-ish" to be as "poetic" as I'd prefer for the POY, but I still found it to be a quality write. Congrats on your silver in the previous contest, and thanks so much for sharing this.

    Best wishes,
    ~J.

  • celadia
    January 2, 2008
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    So sad but its true for some people. Its so good when a poem can catch the pain so truthfully.


  • Jim Berkheiser
    January 2, 2008
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    Yes

    Good luck.


  • Arkbear gold member
    January 2, 2008

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    No ~

    Waaay too many Filler Words here to be *poetic* for my taste ~

     

    The best to you and your other entry,

    Bear ~


  • ZachP gold member
    January 2, 2008
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    Yes~

    very commontheme, but this had me saying dayyyyyyum

    Good luck

  • dillpickle62
    December 29, 2007

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    wow!

    Wow, wow, wow...This is better then Great! Jeez your verrry impressive as a writer. And ta' think I stumbled onto you by accident.


  • Atrophya
    December 29, 2007
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    my god, im sorry. I really am. this is terribly painful.

  • ecrivain01
    December 24, 2007
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    This won't work for this contest ...

    as I stated in the rules. No woe is me poems. NONE. Nada. Pas du tout.

    I am sorry for your situation, if this is an actual depiction of a true situation, but this doesn't belong here. There are hundreds of contests on this site where you can enter this. Good luck with that.


  • Blooming Poet
    December 19, 2007

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    This is so sad, but.....


    I love it. I was almost crying it is that amazing. Thank you for following my rules and telling your option. Your ability to be personal and not cliche will get you far in my contest.


  • Tarja
    December 19, 2007

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    Congrats on the silver trophy... this was very depressing to read about. I give you my sincerest apologies for your loss. Thank you for entering such a dramatic and personal piece. I admire that you used so many options too... good luck.

  • pastel2000
    December 17, 2007

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    This poem is so wonderfully written. I could feel the pain more and more in every word. The tears were flowing so much that I could hardly see the screen. As always you have out done youeself.

  • blackhawk78
    December 17, 2007
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    Oh my sweet lord, Im crying my heart out, part of my innocence was just lost forever.


  • Turning-To-Dust
    December 17, 2007
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    Ok. You have no idea how much this got to me. struck me in the heart and made me tear up. i don't think any other poem has down this to me. I felt everything you said and it flowed so beautifully. Well done!
    Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.


  • infinitechaos07
    December 15, 2007

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    Ok OMG I'm crying right now. That is very touching, the ending. I've had 3 miscarriages and am still trying to make peace with it. Cameron Matthew 2/14 Hailey Jo 6/27 and Jayden Christopher 9/11 Very well written but so sad.


  • jessebyrons
    December 15, 2007

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    Wow Jamie, tres bien! This is tragic, very sad and moving, what a wrencher of the heart your words are.

  • mrme gold member
    December 14, 2007

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    Oh my,, such powerful words. This poem breaks my heart. Too sad for words. Excellent story telling here. The pain and feelings of emptiness are so well expressed. All I can tell you my poet friend, you never know what good fortune tomorrow may bring. I know this is quite possibly a reflection of a low point in your life (hopefully not true), and if it is, just remember, sometimes when you least expect it, wonderful things happe. Be strong.


  • jcat gold member
    December 14, 2007

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    OH........WOW!!!! My heart literally crumbled and fell from my chest. I am bereft of words here!! You did an amazing job on this. I could truly feel the pain in this piece as if it were my own...

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