sound asleep in bed
I heard a sound
suddenly I turned my head
standing in the darkness
He was there
His hands reaching out... for mine
as I was asked
"could I have this dance tonight?"
a thousand angels, standing watch
anticipating, wondering
what would I do
resistence... I had none
as my hand did respond
His radiant love, so filled the room
He said...
I just want you to dance with Me,
while the angels look on
come..
We'll dance through the night
around My Throne
You can stand on My feet
if you need to
I'll never let you fall
as long as you hold on
to My right arm
and if only you let Me...
I'll lead you
Seems we danced forever
swirling, swaying
gravity left my feet
totally abandoned to the dance
lost in His pure, sweet embrace
He pauses...
His loving gaze fell completely upon me
more loved, I became
more than any love I've ever known before
Again ..
we danced
the wind of His Spirit
blowing my hair
my gown...
floating in air
swirling, turning
We danced...me and Jesus
...for eternity
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A contest entry
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800 points, ended December 16, 2007, 20 entries
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Comments
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Loving a spirit... original idea and i really love the way you wrote this... so beautifully... and the ending was so perfect...
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I loved this! The best poem I have read over the last few days! I definately believe that our relationship with our faith can be viewed as a love affair of the spirit. You have penned a great poem here. thanks for sharing. peace always in ALL ways...
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thank you so much Kendall! what a wonderful comment on this write of mine. it is very appreciated.
Mary
Silverbutterfly
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Calm and Fluid
I like the movement in the poem. It makes the reader sway.
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thank you again for your very kind comment!
Silverbutterfly
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I so love the imagery you have written here. This poem is very uplifting. I really enjoyed reading it. What a picture of His incredible love.
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Such a lovely poem of love experienced thru just a dance...
Such love is stronger than physical love! I bookmarked this poem.
return the favor?
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oh thank you! I count it an honor that you even read it!!!
SilverButterfly
Mary
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Simple divine. You writing is simplistic yet at the same time complex, and highly beautiful. The imagery and symbolism here is wonderful, and the picture matches the poem perfectly! Well done on a superb write. Thanks for entering the contest
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This is terrific! You keep it simple but it had so much elegance to it. The rhythm was stunning. It was just amazing. Really it is.
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awwe thank you so much neoladyem! I appreciate you reading and commenting on it. I'm happy you liked it.
GBY
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This is beautiful, i wish i could write an eloquent comment that truly depicted how my heart responded to this write. It moved me. It was just what i needed. Isn't our Lord so great?!
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The picture is very beautiful and you have done it justice with your vivid imagery of the spiritual dance you have created.
'the wind of His Spirit
blowing my hair
my gown...
floating in air
swirling, turning
We danced...
...for eternity'
an ending without end, perfect!
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What a wonderful way to put something so personal and wonderful. I’ve never thought about it as a dance, but you’re right. Very good symbolization. I think it is awesome the way you symbolize Christ as our dance partner. And your fingers have danced across the keys to produce yet another inspirational write. I enjoyed it very much.
Thanks, and may you be blessed.
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This is a beautiful write, I love every word of this and yes only if we allow then He can lead and what a wonderful dance in life you have written across this page, Just beautiful !
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Wow. What an awesome poem. Thank you so much for writing this!
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oh thank you sweetie for the nice comment. I so appreciate it !!
Mary
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Love it, Love to dance so I understand wel the enjoyment you must fill, Dance for eternity sound like my kind of heaven,
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thank you my friend for the nice comment. have a great day!!!
GBY
SilverButterfly
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SO LOVELY AND INSPIRING!!!
This is a wonderful poem, filled with a tender and loving inspiration.
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this was elegent and light and beautiful
and deep and filled with love and packed with images
and i do belive that io want to print this poem and frame it for my wall if you will allow me please
i just love this poem
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oh I would be very honored for you to print it!!!!! that is such a kind gesture my friend.
GBY
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Sweet poem, very gentle and touching.
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well...I'm in tears with this one...
this line pivoted my soul:
You can stand on My feet
if you need to
I'll never let you fall
oh how I have stood on His feet...too many times to count...for there is no there explanation as to why I could stand at all...
the gravity of God is always perfect!
this is so well done...stellar poetry is pouring from your pen...and you know why? these words are falling from a heart that holds the Light...and your Light shines brighter each time you share it...
I am in awe of you and your poetic ability to pen these uplifting poems Mary...
and you do it masterfully...with grace and a style that is uniquely...and beautifully YOU...
Blessings! Tammy
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What wonderful compliments! What uplifting words YOU give ME! Tammy I have a hard time knowing how to tell you how grateful I am for the encouragement you so freely give me...ALL the time!!! Thanks isn't nearly enough
Mary
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Very spiritual and beautifully written. I was floating in the air myself by the end. An uplifting piece of work that has changed the feel of my day, thank you so much I look forward to reading more...have a wonderful day,Anne
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Anne thank you so much for reading it. I'm so glad it moved you.
GBY
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this was great.
it was well written.
im very happy i gave u HM you truly earned it.
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beautifully writen i love your style and presentation
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sweet memories fill the heart as well smiles that fill the day with this. I can hear the joy one moment at a time!
Beautiful my friend!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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i love the part about standing on his toes. that's always a good thing to say. it makes me remember childhood and dancing with my dad. thats my favorite part.
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awwe I'm glad it brought such sweet memories about your dad. thank you sweeite for the kind comment!!
GBY
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lovely lovely poem
so wonderful and rich in the imagery. Thankyou for
sharing this beautiful dance with us...that last line
we could feel you both dancing through eternity!
absolutely lovely!!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) good good job poet!!
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awwe thank you friend! I'm very happy you liked it. you are so sweet Kathleen
GBY
Silverbutterfly
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sweet....dreamy
Lovely ideas and images..dreamy feel which befits the setting of the piece. I am not comfortable offering any critical comments because I rarely write free-verse...
All the best,
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Mat thank you so much! Your comment is so appreciated
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Wow...you are reallyyy good
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sweetie thank you so much! I'm very happy it touched your heart!!!!
GBY
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this is an amazing beautiful write. best of luck...andy
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awwe thank you so much Andy! I so appreciate your kindness!!!!
GBY
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How touching, loved the visuals.
Adding conversation to the dance
was a brilliant choice.
You could have danced in silence,
but the emotion might have been lost.
"the wind of His Spirit,
blowing my hair
my gown...floating in air
swirling, turning
We danced..."
That is the imagery that makes this
piece work.
Good luck in the contest.
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I appreciate your opinion very much. thank you for reading this write.
GBY
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wow, this is pretty good. I like how you wrote this. Best of luck in the contest! Keep up your amazing work!
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thank you sweetie! you are very kind
GBY
SilverButterfly
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Excellent write here
I love every word of this write and it is wonderful the vision within it to hold within ones heart to be true
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thank you sweet Ap friend!!! I'm so happy you were touched by it
GBY
SilverButterfly
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We'll dance through the night
around My Throne
You can stand on My feet
if you need to
I'll never let you fall
as long as you hold on to my arm
and if only you let Me...
I'll lead you
kudos to you amazing write
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thank you so much! I truly appreciate your comment!!!!
GBY
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The part that is the most attention grabing, spotlight of the poem is:
a thousand angels, standing watch
anticipating, wondering
what would I do
resistence... I had none
as my hand did respond
His radiant love, so filled the room
And the last line, ...for eternity.
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awwwe thanks so much!!!!
GBY
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Breath-Taking!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This is just breat-takingly Beautiful!!!!!!! I love this angle of the love of God. It is just anotherway of showing his amazing love for us and how if we let him he will lead us through this life like a dance, holding us,, protecting us leading us according to his will for our lives. You did a wonderful and creative job on this poem it is just beautiful as I said before!!! Thank so much for sharing it as a wonderful testimony for Christ!!! Merry Christmas to you!!!~~Toni~~
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Thank you so much Toni! I'm very pleased this write has touched you.
Sorry this comment is so short, but I have to go get dressed for The Dance!!!!!
GBY
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O' my this is just beautiful and I love the flow of it...stand on my feet if you need to I will never let you fall...sighs...just breath taking my sweet friend
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thank you my dear friend I appreciate the sweet comment sooo much!!! You always encourage me
GBY
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