Ghost of an Angel

Oh soundless drift, sway of brilliant moon
Luminescent orb soft in mocking light
Cascade dark sky with the gentle hum
Transparent float of silken wing
Caressing tides from heaven touch
Shivers on ashen silken skin

Golden tresses shield a tear streaked face
Disguising pain in gleaming eyes
Mourning laments, oh murderous rage
Haunts thy dreams forevermore

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Picture Inspired # 1 by cirque du soleil. 300 points, ended December 16, 2007, 9 entries
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amaranthine lover
December 18, 2007
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absolutely beautiful, I love the imagery that you delved into here

"Golden tresses shield a tear streaked face
Disguising pain in gleaming eyes "

I especially really liked this line, I like how the golden hair is a shield to emotion, beautifully done.
creationsfromheart
December 18, 2007

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love the poem
however this line slowed the read down from flowing
"Caressing tides of heaven touch"
Caressing tide of a heavenly touch.
or maybe caressing tides of Heavens touch.

The Heaven just stops the flow.

But again I love the write over all
celadia
December 17, 2007
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Very beautiful, flowing language, it sounds mystical. You have good talent.
Beriothien
December 16, 2007
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twas very gooood (:
i like <3 love ya my queen