My being is immersed
in despair;
another fugue settled,
ambushed senseless.
Chafing at unknowns,
concerns alternate.
Competing in
revolving arena
of divided mind.
Will optimism prevail?
Polly return?
Stay tuned judgmental eyes,
you'll glimpse my affliction.
For rare will it be,
i spill my stains
from the fabric of my core.
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am in a rapid-cycling bi-polar funk right now... so to everyone for a bit...
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the way that you address eyes is gorgeous.
"stay tuned judgmental eyes"
your word choice is perfect. from "fabric of my core" to "ambushed senseless" to ""chafing at unknowns". i never see words used like this. you've got a gorgeous writing style.
however, one of my best friends is bipolar, and this doesn't seem very bipolar to me.
otherwise, this is really pretty. minus the emo-ness, you've got talent girl. -
Wonderful rich dark poem!
polly returned...gosh..I haven't heard that in years-
very good !! beautiful dark poem, good job dear
poet...haunting and pulled us right in ...we couldn't
wait to see where you would take us!
good good job!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : ))
p.s. perhaps bipolar brings you a writing gift, a duel
thinking to unravel, ravel, bring darkness into light,
and light into darkness. Keep writing will look
forward to reading!
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thanks everyone for the kind comments... i hate this phase..and am now a cranky wench...LOL... emo-osity? Now that's a new one..LOL Peace everyone and thanks again... Desi
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Well Done
A personal affliction I too can relate too as an ongoing Bi-Polar 1, who suffers from delusions of grandeur as the ArchAngel Michael trying to sound his trumpet that Revelation is here already and the time for Peace and Zion is now. Hope this comment is well met.
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I thought we all suffered with delusions of granduer... LOL
to you Michael... peace desi
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this is good
don't hurt your writing with too much emo-osity.
it was brilliantly done, maybe the question were a bit much. i loved that you used the word affliction. i never hear or see it. -
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and thank you... re-read and tell me what you think could've been better other than my emo hanging out
... peace..desi
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