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Pavor Nocturnus

Another self induced night terror ~
Mumbled screams! Unable to fully rouse;

ethereal veil between slumbering
madness & an insane tranquil repose

Nicotine, caffeine, dopamine,
or maybe an evil Devil gene
unsure what it could have been
only know it's still haunting

and fully knowing some synthetic

nightmares visit my waking panic,
I encourage more the next night
with chemical invitations 

romancing an inner lunatic - 

those most terrible that
I remember upon waking,
are filed away in folders
inside my head...
with memories titled
"Visions of Hell" or
"Dance with the Dead".

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: Synthetic Nightmares

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  • penman gold member
    March 21, 2008
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    Excellent

    So very well done. Congratulations on the honorable mention.


  • Barely Breathing gold member
    March 21, 2008

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    This is brilliant. I could so relate to this and loved how you have written this. My favourite lines were "with chemical invitations romancing an inner lunatic". This is so brilliantly said. Well done and best of luck for the contest.


  • Blooming Poet
    March 18, 2008

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    ohh, scray and creep. one heck of a night terror indeed. Fav:
    Another self induced night terror ~
    Mumbled screams! Unable to fully rouse;

    ethereal veil between slumbering
    madness & an insane tranquil repose


  • adsaige
    December 26, 2007

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    I find that this is a good dark poem for our Group Contest. I'm sorry, it's taken me so long to comment [and post my own] nonetheless, we're talking about the poem.

    The Poem:
    and fully knowing some synthetic

    nightmares visit my waking panic,
    I encourage more the next night
    with chemical invitations

    romancing an inner lunatic -

    I cannot help but find that was the most powerful stanza of the poem, and not only that, my favorite! Good luck in the contest!




  • ears2hearyou gold member
    December 23, 2007

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    BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!

    damn...now that's a scarey ass pic!oh.. I just love
    how you write...your effective use of the words..just
    blows me away! ethereal veil..man..that is good!
    oh..that was hot..romancing an inner lunatic..have
    you met my husband? laughing! great last stanza..so
    much to learn from you! great job poet! great job!
    ears2hearyou


  • SaintLoner
    December 17, 2007
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    Really nice. Paints evily realistic pictures in the mind.


  • GFP Vault
    December 16, 2007

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    I found this very entertaining. At the first I thought okay it's good, but as it went on you really pulled it all together. A force to be reckoned with. Very Good!


  • Decent Green
    December 15, 2007

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    Good write. You set the mood of the poem very well with your use of specific diction. I got a weird feeling from the use of caffeine in you montage of substances. Maybe a different one with the same -ine ending. Good luck on your contest


  • Dalaney gold member
    December 15, 2007
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    I'd say you have this prompt
    pretty much taken care of...

    Lane


  • Animarising
    December 15, 2007

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    Oh now I really like this. Very nice imagery but an unusual feel. Excellent, especially "Nicotine, caffeine, dopamine,
    or maybe an evil Devil gene" ..that works great. Well done. Good luck in the contest


  • silverflowers
    December 14, 2007

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    This gave me cld chills during parts of it.
    Although I'm not a huge fan of rhyming poetry, this is nicely done.


    • Grimoire
      December 15, 2007
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      It rhymed? Huh, I wasn't aware that I had even rhymed in this one... except for the last stanza. (Just kidding, of course)... Glad it gave you chills. I actually suffer from this condition from time to time.

      until immolation,
      homewrecker

  • WhyNot
    December 14, 2007

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    This had a lot of really good imagery! I also really liked your word choice. Well done!


  • Silverblade
    December 14, 2007

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    Overwhelming

    The impact is powerful, and though I could not have insight into this myself-- I must confess, you certainly did a good job in portraying that. The image above emphasizes the piece itself well.


  • Nuage
    December 14, 2007
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    Oh wow this is so good. All the imagery is intense! And the vocabulary is diverse and intelligent.


  • PerfectImperfection
    December 14, 2007

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    WOW! That picture is intense!!! Working quite well with the prompt, this piece adds a sort of hypnotic flair to darkness within dreaming, and lucidity above the rim.
    Deep streaks of internal demise; living without 'life' coursing through those moments of slumber - even when awake. A great write!


  • PastelMoons gold member
    December 14, 2007

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    That's some pic.
    I know that monster
    I love this piece"insane tranguil repose"
    every time I read , I get shivers...
    Awesome imagery,
    and the last stanza is pure genius--
    'Folders in your head'
    'Dance with the dead'
    What a remarkable poem!!!
    ~Pastel

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