beyond a Murial design
a land of paradise
a magical illusion
in beautiful disguise
where cotton candy blooms
and candy apples grow
colorful tuliped lollipops
and ice-cream made of snow
gummy bears dance and sing
licorice grows in vines
chocolate covered cones
fall from fudge-dipped pines
butterflies with neon wings
angels nestled in between
hum in perfect rhythm
with hummingbirds that sing
there you can sit for hours
and lazily nap and dream
and quench your thirst, if you desire
from a rainbow colored stream
A contest entry
- What Do You See Now ? (Round 2) by just mercedes.
500 points, ended December 14, 2007, 6 entries
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Please tell me what you think
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I wanna go there, please, please, please take me there, would ya, huh, would ya? It's snowing here like mad!
I see this place you've made come to life. I so yearn for such a place where everything is magical. That's what you've penned my friend. I hope you win this contest with this delightful work of rhyme and fantasy. Simply Beautiful!
Much Love & Merry Christmas yo You & Yours ♥
Renee
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As I read this, I could hear Leon Redbone singing The Chocolate Bonbon Ball in the background, what a great take on the prompt, which represented vegetal growth. You ran with this - of course the land of paradise is a beautiful garden, and you went in and described the good things in it. Well written and descriptive poem, a lot of fun. Thank you.
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aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah, this is awesome write girly!!!! woot~ You did a fabaloso job~
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Oh what a land this would be...
I love this piece well done and best of luck in the contest.
Delila
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thank you...it was a nice dream
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