Underneath a twilight moon
my heart and soul silently breaking
suddenly heaving breaths of anguish abate
as I find myself amid surrealistic wonder
A rain of roses floods the skies
and the perfect blooms fall about my feet
as though carpeting my future with the promise of love
Author notes
Picture inspired - 7 line limit
In a list
A contest entry
- ~* In What Voice Can You Speak *~ by Desire.
525 points, ended December 17, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Detailed critique welcome
Comments
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Rain of Roses
Oh My
Powerful piece that grab the reader
to see what You have written
You take the person there...
Love the images brought forward with the words:
carpeting my future
and
surrealistic wonder
Beautifully versed
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also
Your Talent!
**Judging will be done shortly
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Well done poet!!
Brava!! You have painted a portrait in words ever so eloquently; as surely as a heart beats there is no doubt the life enscribed is as realistic as the imagery and emotion you have painted in words
Wishing you and yours a joyous Holiday Season
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surrealistic wonder with the carpeting of blooms...a future love is beautiful...excellent language. best to you in the contest ~Trisha~
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