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Nursery Crhyme.

Little Miss Molly
She sits all alone
Sits all alone,
Still as a stone.

Little Miss Molly
Hears a sound that scares
A loud sound that scares
From down the stairs.

little miss molly
hears a knock at her door
a knock at the door
and then a few more

little miss molly
she does not say hello
does not say hello
hopes away it would go

little miss molly
hears her door open wide
her door opens wide
and someone there beside

little miss molly
sees who stands there
and as he stands there
he gave her a scare

little miss molly
she sees him come in
sees him come in
he wears a huge grin

little miss molly
sees an axe come down
a big axe come down
that strikes her to the ground

little miss molly
she cries out in pain
cries out in pain
and utter disdain

little miss molly
dies on this day
dies this sad day
in a most gruesome way

little miss molly
she sits all alone
sits all alone
under her stone

Author notes

Obviously i wrote my own morbid nursery rhyme, and this was a really long version of the best i could do. Looking back, I can tell it's forced in places (BAD) but for some reason am a little fond of this one.

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  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    April 20, 2008
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    Very scary write, but good

  • Wanted By You
    December 15, 2007
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    I liked it. I liked how it all flowed together and was fast paced.


  • Tarja
    December 15, 2007

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    This was not at all really my cup of tea. It wasn't intense enough and also you did not technically follow the rules, so thanks anyway.


  • Astral Flare
    December 14, 2007
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    Eeeee...eeeee!

    Wow, this was incredibly dark. You couldn't have chosen a better background for this poem, by the way. I really enjoyed the rhythm and setup for this poem, and...it was creepy. Nightmare-inducing creepy. Best of luck in the contest!
    -Tim (Astral Flare)


  • SomeGirlYouKnew
    December 13, 2007

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    i love this. it gave me the chills.
    parts of it seem a little choppy, but i guess thats to be expected from this format of poetry.
    good luck in the contest


  • MagnusPiked
    December 13, 2007
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    this is fantastic! Have you ever read Tim Burton's collection, 'the melancholy death of oyster boy'? well, this was better, and i really love that book. good luck in the competition, i can't see you not winning... this is great.

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