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Aluminum






Jammed
Into a left-brained world
I watch Alice slip down the rabbit hole
unescorted.

She
to suffer her premature burial
and I to slowly slip
into an aluminum based
amnesia.












Author notes

I have a feeling I will have to explain this one. Not only is my work sucking up all my time it is forcing me into a left-brain (math, columns, logic) thinking pattern 10 hours a day.

This is taking me further and further away from the intuitive. I miss Alice.

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  • sixtimesseven
    December 13, 2007
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    I love Alice a lot

    anyone who can relate anything to Alice makes me happy. this is short, sweet, and serene. cheers


  • starrynight3636
    December 13, 2007

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    Original

    I liked this poem. I think you have strayed from the left-brained world, and I enjoyed the excursion. Your phrasing and enjambment were refreshing.


  • honorable mention
    December 13, 2007
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    interesting