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Candy....

You tease my sense with candy

 so sweet and smooth.

What I need was real food,

  fulfilling and with nourishment.

 To help me grow and thrive .

 Now I'm left with an empty wrapper .

 How will I survive ?

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  • AnotherFace
    December 18, 2007

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    I've got to say. With such a short piece, it is very strong. You really have some talent in you!

    Thank you for entering my contest.
    I apologize it's taken me so long to look at this.


  • Gigglegasm gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    This is a great piece. Short, simple but says it all!The sense of disappointment at the end is over-powering! Just brilliant!


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