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Mermaid's Shell {Haiku to lost treasures}

~ A silver mermaid

Frolics amid the seaweed

Searching for her shell ~

Author notes

Kinda based on the epidode of Charmed when Pheobe becomes a mermaid...
Written October 31st, 2003

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  • santori
    November 3, 2003
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    All clear and sparkling. Lovely.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 2, 2003
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    LOL This one I can see clearly, it gives me the feel of myself trying to find the simplest things around the house when they are right there in front of me and yet I cannot seem to remember where they are lately LOL Well done hun )

  • Skystealer
    November 2, 2003
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    I never saw that episode but i really like this Haiku,
    I can never write them so i am jealous of your ability to write so much feeling in so few a words.



  • Bluestar
    November 2, 2003
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    Beautiful piece - you made the image of the mermaid so magical, surreal and beautiful - excellent write
    Much love to you
    ~*blue*~
    xxx xxx

  • a raw rose
    November 1, 2003
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    Sweet and simple. A beautiful piece. Keep them coming!
    Erica

  • MysticRoseTears
    October 31, 2003
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    Lovely just lovely


  • haikumonk gold member
    October 31, 2003
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    Wonderful.......

    Don


  • October 31, 2003
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    Thought for a moment this might allude to MermaidSinging of AP fame, who frolics rather a lot. Attractive haiku. Has a musical quality to it.


  • Kalexi
    October 31, 2003
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    Scarlett

    Amazing haiku , mermaids are so intriguing

    s
    Karen

  • Confused Gemini
    October 31, 2003
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    i kinda figured that and it is a good episode and this is a good poem muahz to ya

    Gem


  • Almighty Aphrodite gold member
    October 31, 2003
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    I saw that episode! (really cool by the way)

    I wonder what it would be like to be a mermaid...I want to be able to live underwater for a while. It would be a great escape from this horror on land. And there's bound to be a million treasures you can find on the ocean's bottom...that is, if it's anything like The Litte Mermaid. (I love that movie)

    Many blessings,

    Raven Aurora


  • Topangagirl
    October 31, 2003
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    aww this is cute i really like it it's so much different from what i usually read good job!!

    ~*Toppy*~


  • Blushfulmoon silver member
    October 31, 2003
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    Oh this is beautiful
    I just posted one too first since last week]
    I have had the flu sighs
    Do drop by and see me won't ya
    Happy Halloween hun
    Susan~~~~~

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