love is not a Boolean value,
we agreed, but
how itchy the sweater felt
underneath my feet
waiting
for your keyboard to dry
– you wanted salvation
through technology
and pixel days,
i expected perception
that’s more than
a video game –
we bookmarked
perfection
to read each other
instead
Author notes
Written Dec. 13, 2007
In a list
A contest entry
- Metaphors...Metaphors...Metaphors! by Metaphorist.
600 points, ended March 26, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - At the end of the day.... by SomethingPoetic.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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cute
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Well done. I love how you referenced several areas- math, computers, literature. Enjoyed it! Thanks for entering.
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haha, i am stanza two. just replace video games with allpoetry.
well done. slightly dissapointed. just slightly.
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What is love but a sum of electrons flowing to random accessed memories? I like your style here, not too heavy handed or emotionally flat. Elegantly ironic, you have a talent for catching a crackling undercurrent of halted emotion. This creates a level of intensity that seeps out between the lines.
Very impressive.
CaliOkie
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this is creative- i appreciate the entry here
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That last stanza is strongest to me, I really like the direction you took this in, even though to me it reads more technical than industrial (they can interchange)
Thanks so much for entering, and good luck.
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This is soooooooo cool.
Love the bookmarked part at the end.
Best of luck
Becky
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