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Hateful Love

After all this time you still won't come with me
You don't belong to him but you still reside by his side
Like an addict to his "love"
But I'm still here

I'm not going to leave
And my world is crumbling to oblivion
Because of the fear that I might live in a place where you might not be
If you take your life and put it in his detestable hands

Why do you do this to me?
To your loving concerned family?
I know you love me and you know I adore you
And I'm still going to be here
Even after your heart stops beating

But during your last shallow breath
My soul will be ripped to shreds by mammoth despair
And all will be lost in the depths of my personal hell

I can't stand it when you hold each other close
For in my mind it's just you and I
In a peaceful world where he doesn't exist
A place where no one can disrupt our love

But you chose him
Even after I pledged my infatuation to you
You chose his frozen unbeating heart
Instead of my warmth and freedom

How I hate his every being
Hate how he has pulled you into to his clutches
With just the simplest gestures and the words I love you
When that should have been me

We would have been right together
But now you have crossed the line
To a place where I can never exist
And my heart just stands broken and bleeding on the snow covered ground

The ground from which only four heartbroken paws now run
Run to the outskirts of my life
Away from the memories of you
Never to return again







Author notes

I made this from the stand point of Jacob in the "Twilight Series" by Stephenie Meyer. This hopefully explains how he feels about Bella.
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  • BrokenBleedingWolf
    December 18, 2008

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    I love this poem so much! Excellent job on Jacob's feelings. His despair, pain, and suffering are very evident in this.


  • Jfd
    June 26, 2008

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    I was able to pick up this poem was from Jacob's standpoint after just a couple lines....this was interesting piece and I think you were able to capture Jacobs emotions well....thank you for taking the time to enter!


  • NiurTarow
    March 24, 2008

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    Wow. It didn't take an explanation to see that Jacob was clearly the focus here. I could feel his despair, his anger. He is howling in approval, of that I'm sure. Masterful, dear poet. Good luck in the contest.


  • ConvenientExcuses
    March 7, 2008

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    Poor Jacob. I love this piece, and all the emotion you've captured with your words. Well done! Thanks for entering and good luck!


  • N e a r
    February 3, 2008

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    This reminds me of how I felt a few years ago... only I didn't hate the guy (I was just jealous), he never went out with her, and they hardly knew each other...

    And creating a poem from a fictional character's mind? Wonderous!
    Nicely done!

    Thanks for sharing & entering your write in A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!

    M a r l u x i a


  • LoneFairrie
    February 3, 2008

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    Ah poor Jacob. I can so see this. Like the very ending part of eclipse was told from Jacobs point of veiw. Very nice. Though I do recall Jacob saying he would take her even after her heart stops beating, as long as she doesn't stink too bad. :-P Good Luck, well done!

    • ShadowsMidnightRose
      February 3, 2008
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      Yeah, lol i remember he's said that he'd still take her, but i changed that part of it. Thank you for reading and commenting! It means a lot!!!!!


  • broken.inside
    January 8, 2008

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    beautiful and breathtaking. this was an amazing piece. i don't even need to read the series to know that this is an exquisite interpretation. but thanks to you i want to. ^-^.

    thank you so much for entering and the best of luck

    • ShadowsMidnightRose
      January 8, 2008
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      Thank you very much, glad i influenced another reader. And your welcome, i had fun entering and reading other entries.


  • lilblueeyesmine1978
    December 23, 2007

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    this is great thanks for sharing with me and good luck in the contest. this has plenty of emotion and i think that you have done some great writing here.


  • SycioSueB
    December 17, 2007
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    Well done * Well put * PRICELESS

  • Rosser
    December 16, 2007

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    Ahh, Jacob how I love you~
    You potrayed Jake very well! I really like the last part. Would you do one about Jasper? *nudge, nudge*

    • ShadowsMidnightRose
      December 16, 2007
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      Lol, thank you very much! Lmao!!! Alright after i write one from edwards point of view towards bella and jacob. I should just label all of these under "Twilight Series Poems"..lol ttyl

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