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When I saw her…


it reminded me of a big fat cow
mooing dumb romance
for the same bull
on their rural lands

ideally made for each other
singing songs of love
within herds of cattle

her eyes like broken stones
embedded in tiny cavities
and cheeks displaying potholes
awkwardly placed
above a stuffed body
too huge
to notice a slender waist
or even a delicate thigh line

a round face
attached to few strands of hair
looks silly with a plastic smile
and that masculine frame
holding swollen flesh
on top and bottom
could only sate a poor hunger

(oh good lord of heavens!!)

it seems
from broken fragments of uncertified talent
all she could do is
either design torn shanties
or be his bedroom queen







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ref http://youtube.com/watch?v=5DNtj0Z3K44&feature=related

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  • Tercil gold member
    December 17, 2007

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    Sometimes, there is a relation on observations that we observe of others, and routine is one of them, I guess I shall skulk back and forth, wondering when this kind of thing is going to stop. In the story of this cow, I guess she has no choice, very sad. attached to few strands of hair
    look silly with a plastic smile
    and that masculine frame
    holding swollen flesh
    on top and bottom
    could only sate a poor hunger. The verse here represents the hardship of life itself, I can vouch for that.


  • Abscessed
    December 13, 2007

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    ahhahahahahaha i think he has found his ideal match...
    my fav line was the one with the pot holes
    this poem just proves that matches are made in heaven (and god bless you've found yours)