one bean,
shared by three
mama, papa, me
heated over a thin candle flame
make believe game of an odd child
Author notes
Prompt: blizzard, 25 words or less
21 words, all little ones
I didn't mean to rhyme, honest I didn't, really
A contest entry
- blizzard- 3 hours by Cat.
500 points, ended December 14, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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sad but true...a great take on the prompt and-or picture...great write Luna
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sigh...this is excellent, Deb, it is such a deep sigh of a poem, I just want to reach into this poem and hug that odd child...
congrats...
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i do like this piece-
i sort of see a family
snowed in- electricity off so the candles are lit and the daughter is playing make believe
or..
there is a bean
a candle
and an odd child..
LOL.. could be that too.
M -
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These words stolen from a lexicon of past lives
lives with its own bitter memories of posey and poverty. Well done my friend. Love, Tom B.
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Yep..I think you're right
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Nice
Makes me wonder how baked jelly beans
would taste.
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...or how jelly beans tast when you're baked.
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lol
who's clever? -
its not really that you taste them.. so much as experience them..
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lol...so true..but even so, I'm a southern girl I prefer fried
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feast...
a stab in the eye with a 3-tined fork is better than a knife in the back from a Cadillac-owning cousin. the fortune is another race...
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The guitar in the cadillac had a broken string, and Mammy cried in Dogpatch
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Awww, this reminded me of one of those old cartoons or Disney films about a destitute little mouse family. Very endearing!
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Thanks
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I do hope this wins
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This is something really special you have here.. and unexpected too.
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Thank you
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This pulls at the heart strings. It reminded me of the way things must have been during the depression.
Love,
Amera♥
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Interesting...
Will they split that bean 3 ways?
Becky
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yep..luv ya, Becks
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