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Romani Spirit

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 Romani Spirit

 

The moonlit corridor paved the way
to our camp outside the town
colorful wagons creak no more
silken tents reflect the fire

senses accosted by sizzling meat
as morsels are passed
from mouth to mouth

slowly musicians serve our ears
as a hand caresses my thigh  

a
Sinti beauty rises in time
barefoot with flowing skirts
raven hair, black as night

and radiant copper skin

tempo increases to lightening speed
as she floats with the roar of the fire

adrenalin surge to a sudden stop
she collapses upon the ground

the hand found its way
to a fleshly treasure
and the heaven ‘neath me skirt

bliss decanted in gypsy life

ask not how thy

blessings befall

 

 

 

 

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  • abuyi
    January 15, 2008

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    beautifully writen.. your picture too
    very sensaul write
    thanks for entering my contest and best of luck


  • myrataal silver member
    January 4, 2008

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    Sensually written ...

    and a delightful demonstration of free verse. Well done, Amera. You are a poet par excellence.

    Love
    Myra


  • creationsfromheart
    January 3, 2008

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    this is wonderful, I knew it would be though as soon as I saw your name I love this line
    slowly musicians serve our ears
    I could so hear some soft music playing this is such a sensual write done in elegant taste and Love the usage of darkened night in this write, always a joy to read your writes...


  • Starhiker
    January 3, 2008

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    It's getting HOT in here...

    Beautiful free verse, Amera, absolutely one of the better free verses I have read so far. It was the title, not the author that attracted me to the poem, as I have genes from the gypsy people (I got gypsy eyes), and the people, their culture, and everything about them have always intrigued my interest... Remember you have to comment on another contest entrant (me?) and comment who in your author notes, according to abuyis rules. Best of luck, Amera! Jim


  • Cup-a-Joe
    December 28, 2007
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    I somewhat want a smoke. She could dance 9 cents out of a dime.
    Joe

  • JM Kenyon silver member
    December 24, 2007

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    Very rhythmic and pleasing write. I don't know if it is meant to seem sensual, but it comes off as exactly that. Impetuous sensuality and highly erotic (I rarely ever check the catagory of a poem unless adult topics are forbidden by rules).

    s and best wishes... ~Genie!


  • Sacrificial Love
    December 23, 2007

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    Deep Sigh...

    I close my eyes...and I can put myself within the lines of this poem...

    I can feel my own skirt floating in the breezes... hand upon thigh...

    I am amazed at how you are able to put me IN your pieces... make me live your words and your thoughts...

    Your pen shall NEVER leave your hand poetess...

    xoxo
    Heidi


  • Swan song gold member
    December 21, 2007

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    Oh boy I can go places with this one. I did pick up the cadence in this poem Well done and good luck.


  • penman gold member
    December 17, 2007
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    Excellent

    Oh my such a powerful poem full of stunning images. Best of luck in the contest.


  • blueyez
    December 15, 2007

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    my mom use to tell us she was gonna sell us to the passing gypsies. Then as she got older she'd say when they came she was leaving with them instead lol. This was lovely and painted a picture in my head in the beginning of the first americans and their struggles and travels for some reason. As always thank you for sharing mwahhhhhhh


    • Amera gold member
      December 15, 2007
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      Oh how cool, let's both join the gypsys and run away together?


  • Never Fall in Love
    December 14, 2007

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    Excellent, not hardcore as I've been seeing around which destroys many of the poems.
    You know the dance they do around the fire? It's really great to see!!
    The grace portrayed in the dance is reflected in your writes - just one of your many talents

    Never ♥


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    December 14, 2007

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    Breath taking to say the least...Your words have painted a sensuous night gathered around the gypsy's fire...The magic in the air! From music to feast with a touch of love in the air*hug* It is wonderful! A winner for sure*rose*


  • PerVirtuous
    December 14, 2007

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    I love the flow of the story... so fluid and relaxed, like nothing is out of the ordinary. Capturing an alien feeling as if it were familiar. Bravo.


  • StarEyes
    December 13, 2007

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    Yes!!!!! You did a fantastic job on this one!! A great story in this one!! I love it!! And you know, I think you are great at free verse as well as form!!! Give yourself some credit girl!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    December 13, 2007

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    wow

    Such imagery. You are an impressive story-teller.
    I love the picture, too.
    Also, once again, your free-verse is incredible.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    December 13, 2007

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    This one does paint a caravan of curvaceous color.
    I love how the dance serves as the seduction.
    Wonderful words written to theme of passion. Blue

    • Amera gold member
      December 13, 2007
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      Thanks so much Blue, you know I'm not a free verse writer but I think I got the piont across and you understood it perfectly.


  • Twilight Moon
    December 13, 2007
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    i like the idea of the poem its really good but seems like its not done yet


    • Amera gold member
      December 13, 2007
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      Thank you but pornography spells it out, erotic art leaves it to the readers mind.

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