wisps of white breath
wave hello and goodbye
before me as I stood
alone covered head to toe
in coats, socks, mittens.
closing my eyes
I pray that when
I finally open them,
you'd be right there smiling
as if nothing had ever happened.
Author notes
I never even experienced snow. I live in the Philippines, a country which normally does not receive any snow or hail. Only in the cold areas such as Baguio will there be anything close to it. It sometimes hails there.
A contest entry
- a winter's day by Cat.
600 points, ended December 28, 2007, 25 entries
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a short piece with wistful longing strongly attached- nicely penned
thanks for entering
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Oh, I like this..and the mystery of what happened..
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Really wonderful image you created with the cool breath in this. Short, to the point, but there is an impact with this.
Good luck. Thanks so much for entering.
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Kumusta kaibigan? This reminds me the first time I saw/touched snow and how thrilled I was but the thrill was short-lived, kasi nanginginig sa lamig. This is a neat snippet. Keep penning.
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I really enjoyed this poem.I love the last two lines the best I think, anyways, good luck in the contest - very nice poem!
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endearing
very nice write . . so true for many . . like "wisps of white breath" and "as if nothing had ever happened" . . good luck in the contest !
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