Late that night
We had a fight
Our words were like bullets
Hitting hard to the heart
As we killed each other slowly
We were dying to be apart
No way back
No way out
We just couldn't talk
And we had to scream shout
As we blew each others minds up
Into kaleidescope parts
Jumped in car
Put foot down
Full accelerator
There was no slowing down
Hearts and minds a thumping
Rounded a bend into oblivion
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CHORUS
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Driven to it
Can't get out
Gotta get to Heaven
'Fore my love has thawed out
Crashed out now fire in my soul
Wanna be with you 'cos you got it all
Author notes
Prompt 16 - The Chase by Kill Hannah
A contest entry
- a lyrics contest for you... by shadowlyn infinitas.
600 points, ended December 24, 2007, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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a nice staccato feel to this that certainly helps the overall emotion one gets from your piece. lines 3 - 6 are nicely written, of the memorable sort actually, along with lines 10 and 11. "kaleidescope parts".. fabulous imagery. the chorus is quite amazing in itself. great piece. thanks for entering my contest and best wishes for your future writing!
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I liked it. Was it a song? If so, I would listen to it. If not, it could be a song. It was very good.
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I think that you have done a nice job with this piece thank you for sharing this with me nad goodluck in your contest.Much love
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