August amber glows in caramel hues,
pyramidal vessel of blessed laughter,
residence of my joyful muse,
universe, of which I am master.
Within sanctuary of sunset colors
Auxo casts her shine on golden wheat
as Thallo binds dreams in wreaths of flowers
under the tambourine's playful beat.
Weightless bliss spills, heaven, recreated Eden.
Bronze shadows of ancient tanned palms,
summer solitude, no one is even,
inner peace joy of quiet whispered psalms.
Nymphs pluck carnelian grape from vines,
fruit of shy Ampelos with rosy cheeks.
Satyr flutes flirt with sacred shrines
of Bakkhic maidens with vermilion streaks.
Fragrant ambrosia! Quench my endless thirst!
Nectar of passion fruit, balm for my soul.
Kiss of Persephone's peach ready to burst.
A pious punch, which makes my body whole.
Mythic kingdom of rosy orchids shines.
Mosaic light, bathed in divine shades,
sanctuary painted with glitter lines,
apricot stars with shine that never fades.
Author notes
My perspective of heaven and pleasure mold around Greek mythology.
Auxo: She is one of the tree Horae, who are the embodiments of the seasons. Auxo represents summer.
Thallo: She is Auxo's sister and represents spring.
Ampelos: A dryad, whose body is connected with grapevines.
Bakkhic maidens: These are the nymphs, who celebrate with Dionysus along with his satyr's.
A contest entry
- NO GREENS! - A Rounds Contest by Idle Mind Wondering.
1700 points, ended December 18, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I like this,your word choice, rhythm and rhyme are all excellent. The definitions in notes are necessary and appropriate; but the explanation being necessary is where this poem lacks, your words should speak for themselves. I was at a loss to the connection with out them. A good effort.
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Truly a beautiful accounting of heaven and pleasure through its relation to Greek Mythology. I have learned something here today. It is prayer like with wonderful end line rhyme.
A soft and flowing piece that could fit many molds. I am not certain without your author notes, I would have seen its relation to the prompt. You have surfaced the beauty of it all with very elegant verbiage and emotion, but it should go deeper to pull these perspectives out. I think this poem has a lot of potential to be expanded.
Thank you for your entry. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Thank you very much for the wonderful comment. I am so happy and excited to see that you have liked it. I will keep in mind everything you said I hope I find the inspiration to expand it and develop everything. Thank you once again!
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This was very beautifully written.
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This is a gorgeous journey banded in shades of sunrise. Myth blends seamlessly with hues of gold
and red to express a divine bliss where only
Spring and Summer tread. I felt this stanza...
"Nymphs pluck carnelian grape from vines,
fruit of shy Ampelos with cheeks.
Satyr flutes flirt with sacred shrines
of Bakkhic maidens with vermilion streaks" made
the biggest impact as it seems to encompass
drink, music, and the beauty in surreal joy. Blue
PS- "joy og quiet" should read 'of'?
"Nectar of oassion fruit" should read 'passion'?
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I think you have done a nice job with this thank you for sharing this and goodluck in your contest best wishes and much love
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