I get up every morning
from my tossing and my turning
he talks to me when i sleep
but he never hears me speak
he always screams, "LET ME OUT!!!"
I fear him
but i need him
I hear him
but dare not listen
for i know his words will glitter and glisten
his ideas twist my thoughts
he steals the time i've bought
and he always screams, "LET ME OUT!!!
Now its his face in the mirror
and my thoughts are his horror
and its him that they see
im stuck on the inside
while he is free
and now im the one who screams, "LET ME OUT!!!"
Author notes
i just kinda threw this together there really was no thought put into it
A contest entry
- voices in my head by Desired-Lucidity.
550 points, ended December 23, 2007, 14 entries
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Comments
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cool
for a quick throw together, you did a good write!
I like the imagery and the darkness it portrays.
good luck in the contest
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Hey! this is a lovely write. A bit confusing, but then, what is there to a piece of art unless it is somewhat ... umm.. what do you call it? yeah.. somewhat different.
I loved this part:
"I fear him
but i need him
I hear him
but dare not listen
for i know his words will glitter and glisten
his ideas twist my thoughts
he steals the time i've bought"
I loved the imagery and the sounds that you've used in your poem... The "let me out" refrain is awesome...
Loved it all.
Cheers! -
...i always knew there was something wrong with your head, Fluffy. lol This was awesome.
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