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Halloweird

Funny thing this Halloween
Strangest thing I have ever seen
It seems that witches everywhere
Decided to perform their duties bare
Each one stark naked on her broom
High up into the night sky did zoom
Sporting and loudly snorting
Cavorting and contorting
Showing their teeth, smiling gleefully
Pointing their painted nails at me
Singing that well known popular song
You know the one,"Without A Thong"
Even much, much more weird
One of the witches sported a beard
And so in a quite small measure
Well maybe more, with great pleasure
I watch my very favorite witch
Fly about with nary a stitch.

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Written October 31st, 2003.PromptD,Holidays.

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  • happy kitty kat
    9 hours ago
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    lol

    loved it good luck!!!

  • JToddUnderhill
    November 9

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    Nice....

    ..... I like this one, playful and fun to read just what I needed at the end of a long shift at work. you rock, I worry about the witch with a beard, Was it a witch or a worlock or did you even look for the C%$%. LOL


  • poisonivystar4
    October 29
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    Now *that's* a riot! Good luck in the contest!


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 21
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    I know I already read this. It was good. You can go too round 2. Keep up the good work. best of luck too you in round 2.


  • funnybone
    October 17

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    this is a funny write dear poet, perfect for the forthcoming celebrations.. i do hope i dont see any naked witches on brooms this year lol.
    well done and good luck in my contest


  • Dryad Enya
    October 16

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    There is a film called Hocus Pocus and in it there is a song called 'come little children' : Come little children i'll thee away, into a land of enchantment. Come little children the times come to play here in my garden of magic. Come little children i'll take thee away into a land of enchanment. Come little children the times come to play here in my garden of magic....

    I think it goes wonderfully with this comedy piece, here you follow this link and here the piece its self: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1_IqEyCqy5A&feature=related
    Best of luck
    Dryad Enya

  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 14
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    This was funny! I already read and commented on this one. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest.

  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 12

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    Haha! This was hilarious. I really liked this. It made me laugh. hehe. This was good. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest. Keep up the good work.


  • Ignis Corpus
    December 23, 2008

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    Wow cute. I enjoyed this much because one, my favorite holiday is Halloween. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.

    Converse Queen


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 23, 2008
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    I stand by my previous comment on this one. Great piece


  • leander Moderators member
    November 14, 2008

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    The rhyme is well done - I didn't really feel anything that's forced in there so that's good.
    The flow is quite wobbly here and there though, but that's not really a big issue.

    Thank you for entering the contest!
    Leande


  • catz Moderators member
    November 9, 2008

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    Lol... You've woven great imagery into this
    semi-naughty poem, very amusing'

    'Without a Thong'...
    Love it!
    Dee

  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    November 9, 2008

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    OMG! This is just grand. To be honest I've been with those nude dancing witches. It is quite freeing and a wonderful experience This is a great poem, very fun and well done in the Halloween spirit. I love it


  • Florida Sunshine
    November 2, 2008

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    I love the title ~ Halloweird what an attention grabber from the start. -- The overall feel gives the 'adult' classic feel to the poem, which to me gives it a poetic edge. ~ Witty and delightful read --- left me wanting more!

    Excellent job in the poem/rhyme and overall scheme. Thanks so much for entering the contest ~ I hope you read this before I judge -- I believe this to be more of a trick than a treat but could fall in either category. You didn't specify -- so please do so.

    It was a welcome treat to read your work,
    Florida Sunshine


  • 2lullabyhaven
    October 31, 2008
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    That does sound like a weird sight...I missed your pen name from being in the AN...lol


  • paperparadox silver member
    October 30, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry...

    Please do not respond in any way to this message until the judging is complete. Thank you.

    Hocus pocus, bare bums in focus! I like the title...very creative! You have drafted a light-hearted take on Halloween, and added quite a new dimension to the whole event. I'll bet there are a few Worlocks who wouldn't be against this practice!


    This is how you scored:

    Laugh-o-meter: 6.5/10

    Spelling/grammar: 9/10

    Flow: 6.5/10 I found it lost its rhythm about half way through, inexplicably, then picked it up again. It would benefit greatly if you could find a way to smooth it out for a better flow. (Just a suggestion, of course).

    Rhyme (if applicable): N/A Free verse structure: 6.5/10


    Total score: 28.5/40

    Many thanks for taking the time to enter this contest, and best of luck!



  • daviscth silver member
    September 4, 2008

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    LMAO!!!!!!!! I can see why this has won a golden cup. The imagery was simply wonderfully and it was very entertaining to read. Thanks for your entry.


  • onesugar gold member
    October 30, 2007
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    This was fun to read

    Had me lol

    ~sugar~


  • lesbian-in-love
    October 30, 2007
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    That was great. That had me laughing all the way through. The first poem so far to do that. I love the lines
    Singing that well known popular song
    You know the one,"Without A Thong"
    Even much, much more weird
    One of the witches sported a beard
    Thanks for entering the contest and good luck to you.


  • Razor-Blade Romance
    October 20, 2007

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    Ok.. Weird and random..
    A funny Halloween poem.
    Nicely done. The Ryme was fantastic.
    Good Luck


  • Riftkin gold member
    October 12, 2007

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    cute and funny

    Even much, much more weird
    One of the witches sported a beard

    now that would be a sight

    Riftkin


  • Tattboyspet
    October 9, 2007
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    There were only 9 entries in this contest and I did specify that if there were not at least 15 I would close it, so thank you for the entry I enjoyed the read, but I'm afraid I am cancelling the contest


  • Tattboyspet
    September 27, 2007

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    hahahahahahahahahahaha ... what a wonderfully delightful write
    thank you ever so for your entry


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 29, 2006
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    This is sooooo freakin' cute! LMAO! I loved this and smiled the whole way through! LOVED IT! Thank you for sharing and for being a part of my contest! Well done!


  • -Honey-
    October 22, 2006
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    lol, i was a bit curious when i read the title halloweird...and oh boy was that weird. I absolutly loved it though, amazing job!


  • FifthDove
    October 18, 2006
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    HAHAHA!!! This is so cute and humorous, I could visualize those naked witches and it wasn’t a pretty sight Thank you for the entry and best wishes in the contest


  • paullallady silver member
    October 17, 2006
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    good

    oh this is hilarious! you did a great job adding humor to a Halloween poem. The wording and the flow were wonderful and it is very creative. good job with this.


  • esroddo silver member
    October 17, 2006
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    Wonderful poem great write with great humor Enjoyed it very much even read it twice. Tickled my funny bone still smilling. (Lisa)

  • hot-tamale
    September 27, 2006
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    great job

    Bawdy and delightful! Thanks for the smile today. Your rhyme scheme is fun, not sing-songy or cheesy. This one is well-written and should put the judges in a fit trying to judge the contest.


  • Frozentearz
    September 20, 2006
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    lol this was fun to read
    those naughty vixen witches on their brooms wonderful
    write and thanks for sharing
    Love and Light
    Frozentearz


  • Frogzter gold member
    September 19, 2006
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    lol I love this one! It is wickedly funny and well written.
    Thanks for sharing and entering it in the contest!
    Warm wishes~
    Frog


  • Starcrossed Dreamer
    September 13, 2006
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    Very nice job. Thank you for the entry, and best of luck in the contest.

    Stephie


  • Starcrossed Dreamer
    September 4, 2006
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    Very cute poem. Thank you very much for entering the contest.

  • Ms Naughty Knickers
    November 3, 2005
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    A witchy delight! This was sooooooo cute! I hope your witches weren't those of the big chin and warty nose variety....and that none of them got splinters from their nude broom riding! HaHa! Thank you for your entry.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    October 30, 2005
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    oh lordy what an image this creates
    i've read some good Halloween poems but this is the best so far
    check out mine "Beware ~The Halloween Weenie" if ya would like some giggles
    i applaud the poet and the poem

  • magoink03
    October 30, 2005
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    oh my goodness that was so funny i loved it and good luck in the contest... thanks for entering


  • Debbie Hansman
    October 30, 2005
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    This is very funny!...I liked it.


  • Tylaste
    October 30, 2005
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    HAha! This is great!


  • TheNatalie
    October 30, 2005
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    I truly enjoyed this. It was the laugh I needed to get a good rest. Thanks for sharing. It was great. Keep writing!!


  • becks place
    October 29, 2005
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    Thx so much for the smile! So well written it's easy to see those naked witches flying about.... *shiver*
    Great write!

  • ocerus
    October 29, 2005
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    This is hysterical! Good job! I wouldn't change a thing!


  • grannyeri gold member
    October 29, 2005
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    What will you think of next? What a cute and weird poem - liked it though, added some humour to this day. Easy to read and understand.


  • dadizgurl
    October 29, 2005
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    This is my fav. out of all the ones I have read on the contest, your makes sense, some people just sound stupid and isnt sending ou the message, even thouhg your's is a twisted version, I like it ALOT! I hope you iwn, Good Luck in the contest!


  • wheezyanna
    October 29, 2005
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    Hi Bill
    Thanks for directing me to this one -

    Naked witches, I declare
    Flying through the chilly air
    Must have been quite rough for some
    With bristly broom 'neath naked bum!

    Longer than your usual style but most enjoyable - thanks for the laugh.
    Cheers
    Anne


  • darkestcorners
    October 29, 2005
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    that was hallarious. me and my friends were like crying when we read this. OMG you created such a funny picture. naked witches with beards. this is definatly one for the Memory Warehouse.


  • Thinking About It
    October 29, 2005
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    very cool! i am putting my points towards you!

  • amz my heart
    September 10, 2005
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    LMAO..this is so funny!! GREAT GR8T job!!!XOXO


  • September 8, 2005
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    haha very original, i like


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    September 6, 2005
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    Hay it put a smile on my face what more could I ask all the best with this
    Paul

  • k soard
    September 5, 2005
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    That is really scary..naked witches...but hey if that's their thing...It made me laugh and I liked the rhyme. Someone said it sounded forced at some parts but it sounds alright with me. It's very old school which is good I love the old school rhyme poems...great write and good luck!


  • October 31, 2003
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    A very strange and yet, disturbingly amusing read LOL
    I'm glad I don't live in your neighborhood...I'd hate to see what Easter is like. Thanks for the grins, I enjoyed reading it.

    Event


  • Ava Noire silver member
    October 31, 2003
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    LMAO!!! Bearded witches wearin' no stitches. LOL This is some funny stuff.

    I'm gonna read this to my nanny. She gets a kick outta stuff like this.


  • October 31, 2003
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    Quite humourous, at times freely so. Somtimes seems a little bit forced, but overall it acheives its aim.

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