We lost each other
in the way of sandstorms -
as the sand rose,
swirling and stinging.
You begged me to wait,
and I did,
hoping for your touch.
Yet, the moon rose and
the storm broke and
a new path appeared.
Years later
after the storm had ended,
and we let each other see
only dull sand-scratched eyes
instead of the oases
we fell into
I promised you a card
from a trip abroad, and
if I had known
the postcard would have
gotten lost...
I would have told you
I still love you.
A contest entry
- For You I'll Wait Forever by GypsyEyes.
475 points, ended December 16, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Suggestions and critical comments are welcome.
Comments
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I love the background color,goes really well with the
type of piece...
I like how the write told a story of lost lovers,and never telling that one person how much their love is wanted and needed...
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Oh my! This is simply beautiful. I just wish the words had been said...just in case that postcard got lost.
I am completely enchanted by this piece. Bravo! ~Pamela
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Romantic poetry!!I love it. Only from a warm heart!!
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Thank you.
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You really do have the heart of a poet. This is totally captivating. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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Thank you.
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judge says
this is really good! i loved the flow! it was a very smooth poem. thank you for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Thank you.
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