I should tell you I
was a mushroom
in my previous life
before the dragonflies
were trapped in amber.
Even then,
you had a way of
making things sticky,
the smell of resin
thick under your fingernails,
and the shank of your leg
dank with dew.
On late evenings
I listened to the
moss and humus
gossip about your limbs,
but when the rain came
I only turned
softer and paler,
still eager for
your semi-precious
stones.
Author notes
I always encourage honest criticism.
A contest entry
- Your very best by Hope Angel.
425 points, ended December 26, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Speak your mind.
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I love the scientific reference in the title, but if this poem is an extended metaphor, I think I'm only understanding part of it.
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Less extended metaphor and more lots of intertwined metaphors...
Thanks for stopping by!
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Erm bit too hippy i cant really connect with the imagery.
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Tust looked it up, and that is a fricken sweet title. All Hale the Shrooms!!!
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Beautiful, and very honest. I adore honesty, so I simply adore you poem. The way we could care less if other talk of them, We still feel the same loveing compassion for them. Very unique first lines too. But I'm sorry I cant say anything about the title, cuz I haven't a clue what it means. >.<
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*laughs* Thanks! Maybe someday I'll write a sequel called ectomychorrhizae...
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...and I love to give it; but here it just isn't needed. As usual you blow me away. I got your message earlier. Hopefully soon you will get some time.
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I had to look up the title, and now have the image of special little lifegiving fungi, trapped within the roots of plants, helping them maximise their chances of survival. Thank you for that! The poem is well written, I'm not sure which tree is being addressed, but obviously one that secretes resin. This is very clever.
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This had some wonderful imagary. Yet, I had difficulty getting lost in the poem and grasping what it was about. As a whole it was very good and yet it didn't really capture me. Good luck, great job, keep writing and happy holidays!
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This is one of the better pieces of the contest, but I have not been satisfied with the entries as a whole so I am removing it so that I can delete the contest.
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Very unfortunate about the contest - but I have found the same thing entirely too often. I just don't have the guts to remove my contests and end up judging a bunch of junk lol. Better luck in future contests!
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pretty damn hot
Hot Property
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I always encourage beauty and thought-provoking poetry.
You've given both.
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