Heart filled with so many emotions
Seeming fit to burst
But I hold them all inside
Sharing them is the worst
Head filled with so many thoughts
It's surprising I can survive
I take life slow
And my soul I try to revive
My body worn down with so many things
I build it back up piece by piece
But you kick me hard
Your reign of terror never to cease
I've borne a thousand trials
Enough is quite enough
I don't need you doing this
Making life so much more tough
I've lived a thousand lives
As far as I can see
So beating me through them again
Is not much help to me
I've traveled through so much
In my young, young life
But your presence here and now
Cuts through me like a knife
If you could only feel
The pain you accuse me of
You could finally fathom
The hate, the pain, the love
I do not care for you
But I do not hate you either
Just a little kindness
Would make the world smile wider
So I ask just one single favor
One thing you can do
Change the way you act
And your outward attitude
That may seem like a lot
But I've never had to deal
I would not know, so I'm sorry
If to you it does not appeal
I only hope for one day of quiet
One day of peace and care
Instead of destruction in your wake
Leaving the world to bear
Your problems are not just your own
We all suffer with you
So think of your actions
And who they are directed to
I do not wish to beat you down
Tear you apart so cruelly
As you have done to me
In what can be called brutally
But I have faith and strength
That I will make it through
No matter what you do or say
I will be me, and you will be you
Author notes
I just started writing and this is how it turned out. Though I did have some inspiration from some personal experience. I'd love to hear what you all have to say! Thanks for reading.
And...(this almost sounds like advertising) but feel free to check out all of my other poems. I'm even working on a story. But I have to say, the last part that I've written isn't that great. I'm trying to fix it up.
3rd in dec-feb contest--name: teddybearhugz
A contest entry
- Anything Goes by Beating.
450 points, ended December 14, 2007, 60 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - True colours. by Delicate Fire Water.
450 points, ended December 27, 2007, 20 entries
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800 points, ended January 11, 2008, 40 entries
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300 points, ended January 17, 2008, 65 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best prewrite between december 07 and february 08! by danceswsquirrels.
1910 points, ended April 1, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I decided to post every ones scores so here's yours! based on every ones votes!
0 gold 0 silver 0 bronze 2 hm .5
Jessa♥
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great write!
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I could really relate here. Great job.
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This is the best of your 3 entry's for the contest: Best pre-write between December 07 and February 08! I believe you have a lot of talent for one so young. And will grow in confidence with your poetry in the near future.
I would give you a HM for this poem.
All the best,
~T.S~
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Glad you are writing more poetry now and that things re working themselves out. Strong sentiments shred through these lines - god strong ending - we can only be ourselves, no matter how hard we want to try to be like someone else.
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your author note states that you've just begun to write. pretty good for a beginner
I can just imagine where you'll be with your writing in a few years. find your own style and keep with it. don't be afraid to read and explore other forms of poetry
thank you for entering and good luck
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This is a strong piece, that much is true, but I do think that you extended it past the point upon where it had naturally stopped. Just find the appropriate cutoff point and you'll be all set thanks for entering
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Thanks for sharing this but I'm afraid this poem will not do for my contest. The subject it evolves around I don't find suitable. Sorry but thanks for your other entries. I wish you luck with this in the other contests you've entered it in, though.
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I figured it wouldn't fit. lol Oh well, thanks for reading it anyway.
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Wow, for this to be a piece that you wrote off the top of your head and for this to be the way it turned out! I love it! Thank you so much for this entry, and good luck in the contest!
All the best,
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nice i hope you dealt with those horrid people
feel better!
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well...i'm working on it. maybe if i get lucky, i can present this in class, and then maybe they'd get a clue. but thanks for the comment!
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btw it reminds me of a great movie called Phenomenon
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i love it!! it is really deep...i love ALL of your poems and stories. you are really talented and i could totally picture you getting better and better at this when you are older!!! yay you!!
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i like how you say ur soul ur trying to revive...really deep
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thanks. so did you like it? i just started writing and that's kind of where it went.
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great job for a first write!
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