A simple droplet of doubt ~
The mimics, dance truth upon a ripple.
Furies thrash, and ignite the winds,
While innocence shines rays of right~
~Under your nose, inhaling uncertainty,
your decision awaits,
free will trumps the fates.
A contest entry
- ~* Well Wishes *~ by Desire.
525 points, ended December 15, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 32 of 32
-
Truly deep and beautiful...such a wonderfully creative take on this picture and your words make it shine...congrat's on the Gold!
mystic -
Incredible write!!! Well worth the gold!!!
-
Breathtaking!
Wow you are amazing! I just adore your poem and pages, and such talent and artistry in both.
Love this enchanting poem with its phenomenally graphic scultping into the poetic masterpiece it is. Lovely dancing enchanting descriptives too and such a tue statement of fact.
Fabulous, and most enjoyable, hope you are in print, if not you should be. No wonder you have won so many trophies.
Well done fab work!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
-
Love the lines, mimics dance truth upon a ripple, and furies thrash and ignite the winds. An excellent piece.
-
Furies thrash, and ignite the winds,
awesome line as well. great write, sis, you can pen them wonderful woven poems with glimpses of your mind. Love ya, Sis.
-
How I love this line: "Furies thrash, and ignite the winds"
Excellent. Congratulations on a well deserved gold. Superb! ~Pamela
-
What an awesome picture prompt this is, and what a wondrously worded poem you were inspired to write from seeing it. Great gold to show for your efforts too. Congratulations.
-
Excellent
The poetess speaks in poetry words of factual deliverance for it is when we become uncertain in a situation that our thoughts are filled with doubt as if inhaled as a protective measure. this really was a great write and well worthy of its gold placing well done (HM)
-
Beautiful creativity...I adore the language of this piece . the flow is delicate yet powerful in its message...well done..
Amazing gold...smiles
Peace and many blessings
~A~
-
This is awesome!
Well done and congratulations
to you on your Gold here! A
truly deserving write. Keep up
the wonderful work here my friend!
Jeremy0826 -
Lovely descriptions, "a simple droplet of doubt" and "inhaling uncertainty, your decision awaits." Great concluding line, also. Very nice Congrats on the gold.
-
Excellent
What a creative poem you have written. Congratulations on the gold. -
This is a very wonderful penning
This has a very lovely rhythm.
Wonderful wording and feel
Congrats on the gold
Tony
-
The thought that anyone can inhale uncertainty ... is amazing ... I loved the detail in this one ... this was short sweet and to the point ... loved it ... thanks for your entry and good luck in the contest ...
Much Love
♥Jayda♥ -
excellent~
Love the last stanza sweetie
But the whole poem is perfect
Congrats on the gold whoohoooooo you go sis
Well deserved I might say...love the pic where did ya find it????
I posted a new one too drop by when ya can
Hugs
Susan~~~
-
excellent and well deserving of the Gold...the last three lines are brilliant!...i think you reached perfection in this contest
-
Ah... An excellent piece. To cast your cares into the well and wish them all away into tranquility. Nicely penned!!!
-
Awesome.
Excellent read, congrates on the Gold!
Thanks for sharing, and pen on sweet friend.
Peace, Timothy
-
awsome write dear, so much said with just a few words, perfection from title to the last word. Very creative, and very deserving of the Gold. Congrats!
Blessings,
Sassy
-
Yes, I can see why this is a gold winner!
It is a wonderful way to share some light and joy.
-
wow..this blows me away..no wonder you took gold..this packs punch the whole way through..your decision awaits, free will trump the fates..wow..powerful ending..this one will have to be read over and over..lol..thanx for sharing..
-
Congradulations my dear on the Gold!! I told you this was a great one!! So happy for you!! Love Ya, Don
Keep up the great work hun!!
-
-
Thank you Don...
this piece held a special place in my life right now
and I am very pleased that others are enjoying
-
-
You must email me the story behind this poem my dear friend!! It is so intense and full of perfection due the moment! My email is on my page! I go back and read this poem over and over!! It says so much in few words! Every word counts in the unraveling of the message! Excellent! Don
-
-
-
Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Innocence Shines
Holy Mother of Pearl Jam~
Love how You took this prompt and for some reason when I inhaled the energy ~
I started to cry
You brought forth images with emotion
The mimics, dance truth upon a ripple...
free will trumps the fates
and I kept getting...
there had been events where Spirit
was tested to its highest capacity
and one decision...to go left or right
had to be made...
I kept seeing a decision was made
at first...with consequences felt
but next, a more positive outcome;
control was gained...
if that makes any sense
Your message tugs at the Heart~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent
and voice!
**Judging will be done shortly~~~
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
-
love that final line especially!
wonderful!
-
Oh this was good I am going to go outside and moon my neighbor then send him a box of white chocolates and wish them merry Christmas then kiss his wife right on the lips. See the effect you have on me?
-
Love and delighted in the excellent take on the prompt! this is a stunner to read, and I love the way it played in my mind with imagery! best to you in the contest ~ blessings always~ Trisha
-
Outstanding!!
Wow that is cool!! The approach you took to the Pic is fantastic!!! The message is clear and to the point!! I love this poem!! Don
-
Excellent
Very well done. So creative and powerful. best of luck in the contest.
-
I do love the word play you have within this poem! Absolutely amazing to read!
-
This is Awesome Good Luck with it in the contest Dear.
Adding your comment:
1 - 32 of 32
