Diminutive, intuitive leanings,
to protect fingers from bleeding.
Games having obscured purposeful meanings;
useless thing no one is needing.
Existence leaves function lacking somewhat,
as I wish to be removed this rut.
A thimble of dreaming must be worth something,
beyond life which only seems to sting.
Author notes
The thimble from the Monopoly board game.
A contest entry
- "The time has come," the Walrus said, "To talk of many things" by HeavenScent4U.
700 points, ended December 21, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I love how you have woven the game of monopoly and what some call the game of life together in this piece, well done
A lot of emotional imagery here and I like that.
I believe you might be missing a word from line 6, possibly it should read "as I wish to be removed (from) this rut. Might be me though but I think it would read better like that
Thanks for your wonderful entry and good luck. Be well and be blessed
rules 10
presentation 9
spelling, grammar, punctuation 19
originality 19
how well you handled the prompt 19
overall 19
95 points
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Your prompt is:
one of the pieces to the monopoly game like the car or the dog or whatever
You have until December 20th to complete your entry. Good luck to you. Be well and be blessed
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