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Will I Smell Her Memory, Fifty Years From Now?

 
 

 

 

 
Memory-sense faded swiftly
at first. The eye peeled of visions
from the inside out-
an inverted onion with layers shed
backwards. In time only surface remained
with its salt water shallow, drinking
the light as it emptied of sting.
 
Then sound fell mute, echoes stripped
from the skin drawn taut inside-
beats, of all once hammered deep soon absent.
Like their drummer,
out of tune and hushed away from ancient care.
 

 
The smells still linger, hooked between now
and then, a cheap perfume whose staining scent turns

in mind as wine, ever more expensive with age.
 
 
 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Florida Sunshine gold member
    December 22, 2007
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    Wow ~ this is truly excellent~ I really like it ~ congrats on GOLD woot! Nice job!

  • islekine
    December 22, 2007
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    Congrats on the Gold!

    Very well penned!
    See ya next time!
    Write on...
    Mele Kalikimaka!

  • Idle Mind Wondering silver member
    December 21, 2007
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    Very well done... congratulations on the gold


  • solo wisp gold member
    December 21, 2007

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    Oh my!

    This is beautiful. Congrats on the Gold, definitely worthy many times over.

    -Steve


  • delightfulmess silver member
    December 19, 2007

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    Perfect... You took this unique prompt and penned
    a masterpiece... Well done...

    Best of luck to you in the contest.


    Delila


  • islekine
    December 18, 2007
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    Well done!

    Write on...this was great!
    *PEACE*

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