Surrounded by life's frailties, being stung by it's emotional abuse. I try to comprehend it all.
This life I did not ask for, this world I was unwillingly born into, what should I make of it?
"The grass is much greener on the other side"
Such a lie gabe me false hopes that I would become happy. But in all reality, it's all the same shade. Still fighting my demons, still wanting them to disapate, they haunt me like the plauge.
Emotionaly, I often feel empty, like nothing could ever complete me. Again, I place the mask of happiness where I think it should fit.
I turn to spiritual guidance and still I feel not comfort. It often makes me wonder what it is I turn to. I sit in silence to try and sort my thoughts, it's all one mess. As I raise my fists to fight the world with it's cruelness and confused since of judgement, I fight for all those who have suffered like I suffered. Slitting my wrists to bleed the blood of the innocent, waiting for the justice we deserve but will never get.
A contest entry
- Act Apalled, And Listen To The Past by pillowjoe.
600 points, ended January 3, 2008, 12 entries
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Comments
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WOW its amazing lots of emotion. Good luck on judgement day
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6th line should be "gave" not "gabe"... in the last paragraph or stanza, you should change the first line to "still I feel no comfort" or "still I feel not comforted"...also in the last stanza.. you typed the wrong "since".. it should be "sense"...
Other than these indescrepensies this is a really great write.. i especailly like the last couple of lines:
"Slitting wrists to bleed the blood of the innocent, waiting for the justice we deserve but will never get"
These lines are powerful and show the severity of the situation.. you are a good writer.. you just need to slow down when typing it up and mayb ask someone to pre-read it before you post it...
Maybe we'll see some less dark, slightly emo, sad, and painful poems from you in the future.. i know you and i would like to think that your happiness with us is just a cover up...
kudos to you once again, great write..
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mandy i love you!!!! DONT WORRY BE HAPPY!!!
You already know i like this poem.
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